Can it be considered as a poem?....
I can still hear
The massive voice from the deep seas
Does tears from the mermaid
Still become of pearls?
Ican still see
The beam of light illuminating from that fixed star
Go through the distances of ten million light-years
To come here
To meet me
I can still remember
The person I have loved
But I cannot find him anymore
Except in my dreams and memory
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Ihave tried...but maybe a little silly...hope there's not too much wrong
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Can it be considered as a poem?....
I can still hearThe massive voice from the deep seas
Do tears from the mermaid
Still become of pearls?
I can still see
The beam of light illuminating from that fixed star
Goes through the distances of ten million light-years
To come here
To meet me
I can still remember
The person I have loved
But I cannot find him anymore
Except in my dreams and memory
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I have tried...but maybe a little silly...hope there's not too much wrong
Honestly I would not say this is a peom. But anything is good as long as it express your thoughts and feelings. I can see the deep feelings, somewhat sorrowful, from this piece of work, and that is touching.
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thanks a lot...and silly seems like an adj...
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You are not a silly,yes,I guess a fool could not write a poem. ^ ^
There are nobody will laugh at you .
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