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A New Cell Phone and the Big Cleaning.
I got up at 8 am with a slight headache. I did not want to go anywhere today but I had to go to school. When I was at school my headacher did not leave me alone. I felt really awful and my friends and teachers noticed this. It was good that we were allowed to leave earlier today and after school, I headed to the technical store to buy a new mobile phone because my old phone was broken. I wanted to buy the cheapest one but there were so many good phones and they were not so expensive. I did not want to choose a sensory phone because I am tired of them. I would rather have a phone with buttons. So, I bought a phone with buttons. It was a black "Nokia". There was a camera if UFO flys beside me, a music app to listen to Justin Bieber, a gallery, some games that I do not need at all and, of course, The Internet - great and powerful. The most wonderful thing is as I bought new thing, my headache disappeared! That is why women are so wasteful! I went home smiling. When I came home I decided to have a rest and a little nap but I could not fall asleep and began to investigate a new purchase. However, my headaches began since I had been staying with puppies under the sun for a long time. Maybe, this is reason of my pain. After that, my mum asked me to help her with cleaning. We had to prepare summer kitchen for exploitation. Every summer we move to this kitchen but first of all, it must be pure. It was really good pastime! I was talking to my mum about everything, she told me some German phrases because she had been learning German at school but now she remembers nothing. Interesting thing is that my granny, mother and brother had been learning German at school but nobody knows anything except general phrases. I am the only one member in our family who speaks not only Russian. Yes, I can speak English a bit. By the way, I stopped learning English words and get more focused on English phrases. I create some cards and carry them around. Thus, I learn 20 cards per day. Well, despite the headache it was a very good day! It would be much better if I got correction from you! Bye.
This a very good answer, but the parts in yellow were a bit unclear. What did you mean? I've corrected most of the grammar mistakes in red. Be careful about time phrases/words such as and Subject-Verb-Object order!
A New Cell Phone and the Big Cleaning.
I got up at 8 am with a slight headache. I did not want to go anywhere today but I had to go to school. When I was at school my headache did not leave me. I felt really awful and it was noticed by my friends and teachers. It was good that we were let to go earlier today and I headed to the technical store to buy a new mobile phone because my old phone broke down. I wanted to buy the cheapest one but there were so many good phones and they were not sovery expensive. I did not want to buy atake sensory(do you mean touch screen?) phone because I am tired of them. I want more towould rather have a phone with buttons. So, I bought phone with buttons. It was a black "Nokia". There was a camera if UFO flys beside me (I did not understand this part), music app to listen to Justin Bieber, gallery, some games that I do not need at all and, of course, Tthe Internet - great and powerful. The most wonderful thing is as I bought a new thing, my headache disappeared! That is why women are so wasteful! I went home smiling. When I came home I decided to have a rest and a little nap but I could not fall asleep and began to investigate a new purchase. By the way, my headaches began ever since I had beenbegan staying with puppies under the sun for a long time. Maybe, this is reason of my pain. Afterwards my mum asked me to help her with cleaning. We had to prepare the summer kitchen for exploitation (do you mean preparation?). Every summer we move to this kitchen but first of all, it must be pureclean. It was is a really good pastime! I was talking to my mum about everything, she told me some German phrases because she had been learning it at school but now she remembers nothing. An interesting thing is that my granny, mother and brother had been learning German at school but nobody knows anything except general phrases. I am the only one member in our family who speaks not only Russian. Yes, I can speak English a bit. By the way, I stopped learning English words and get am now more focused on English phrases. I created some cards and carry around it them around. Thus, I learn 20 cards forevery day. Well, despite the headache it was a very good day! It would be much better if I got a correction from you! Bye.
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