New Here

Hi! I'm new in this place. and I came here because I want to improve my English.
I'm learning this language due to my major's book (the good ones) because the best textbooks for my major are in English, and I want to have a successful career. Furthermore,
2 hours ago I took an exam but not about connectors and those kind of things, my exam was a little difficult much; nevertheless, in the part and I have had a few problems was in with the writing.  because I didn't know what I could write, they gave us the topic but I don't have enough imagination. 

I hope to learn a lot here. :)

English is considered a proper name and needs to be capitalized.

There were some run-on sentences that I broke apart and I took out the phrases that really didn't have anything to do with the topic of this paragraph.

Basically, you have done a good job here.  Keep up the hard work, it will soon pay off.

New Here

Hi! I'm new on italki in this place, and I came joined here because I want to improve my English.
I'm learning this language due to because my reference books my major's book (the good ones) are in English, and I want to have a successful career.; Furthermore, 2 hours ago I took wrote an exam about on connectors and those kinds of things, my exam was a little difficult but not much; nevertheless, but in the part I have had a few problems was in the writing, because I didn't know what could to write, they gave us the a topic but I don't have enough imagination.
I hope to learn a lot here. :)

new here

Hi! I'm new in this place, and I came here because I want to improve my english.
I'm learning this language due to my major's book (the good ones) are in english, and I want to have a successful career; furthermore,
2 hour ago I took an exam about connectors and those kind of things, my exam was a little difficult but not much; nevertheless, in the part I have had a few problems was in the writing, because I didn't know what could write, they gave us the topic but I don't have enough imagination.
I hope to learn a lot here. :)

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Hi! I'm new in this place here, and I came here because I want to improve my English.
I'm learning this language due to because my major's books (the good ones) are in English, and I want to have a successful career. Furthermore, 2 hours ago I took an exam about connectors and those kinds of things.  My exam {better: The exam} was a little difficult but not much; nevertheless, inthe parts I have had a few problems was in the writing I had a few problems with the writing parts because I didn't know what could to write; they gave us the topic but I don't have enough imagination {(maybe) better: vocabulary(?)}.
I hope to learn a lot here. :)

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This was well done.  Your transitions (furthermore, nevertheless) are appropriate and for the most part you have a good grasp of the language.  I also have the same trouble when writing in Spanish. "What do I say????"  Maybe we'll each learn some stuff from here  :)