My comic book

Every day I working in on my comic.

I have a history about one a person who follows the people in on the subway ["the undergroud" or more colloquially "the tube" in British English; "subway" has another meaning in Britain, but people understand the American usage too], and one day, the police police captured him.
The police officer have has some questions for this person (he is a man) him (and that these are the questions):

- What are you doing here?

Some people accuse me, they say I´m a thief.

- Do Are you following the people again? [or "Will you follow people again?" depending on what you mean]

Yes, I just wanna [in a comic this is OK, but normally you should write "want to"] talk with people in the subway, every morning I can see that the people need to talk with anyone.

-So, the people just talk with you?

Yes, I ask him them for the time (what time is it), and after that the conversation is more timecontinues.




Well this is just the beginning of my idea. Thanks for reading!

My comic book

Every day I working on my comic.

I have a story about a person who follows people on the subway, and one day the police capture him. (Not sure you mean capture as this would suggest he ran, they chased after him, and caught him.  If this is not the case, the word to use would be 'stopped' not 'capture'.)

The police officer has some questions for him and these are: (I would write "The police officer starts to question him."

- What are you doing here?

Some people accuse me of being a thief. (This does not make sense in terms of the story.  Perhaps you mean 'Why are you asking? Has someone accused me of being a thief?)

- Have you been following people again?

Yes, I just wanna talk with people in the subway. Every morning I can see that there are people who need to talk to someone.

-So, the people just talk to you?

Yes, I ask them for the time and that starts off a conversation.




Well is just the beginning of my idea. Thanks for reading!

My comic book

Every day I'm working on my comic.

I have a story about one person who follows people on the subway, and one day, the police police captured him.
The police officer has some questions for this person (he is a man) and these are the questions:
(I would write here: The police officer asks him some questions:)

- What (why?) are you here? (Maybe: what are you doing here? Or why are you here?)

Some people accuse me, they say I´m a thief. (I would write: some people accuse me of being a tief)

- Will you follow people again? 

Yes, I just wanna talk with people on the subway, every morning I can see that people need to talk to someone.

-So, people just talk with you?

Yes, I ask them for time (what time is it), and after that the conversation continues.




Well is just the beginning of my idea. Thanks for reading!

I have just signed in for italki, and this is the first post that i helped with :) I think the story has potential! Will be waiting for more.

 All the best.