I have made some improvment.can you give me any correction?
Self-introduction
Good afternoon, I am glad to be here. My name is Zengtefei, I am a senior from Chang’an University, I major in Chemical Engineering. By the way, I like English Language as much as Chemistry. Fortunately, I have found my first job at HONDA due to my qualifications..
By and large, I am an easy-going person and I enjoy communicating with people. I like to make friends and in fact I do have many friends. Besides, I am quite active and energetic. and I don’t like leaving things half done; When I have a project to do, I do it thoroughly and on time. In addition, I am organized; I have many duties when I am the Monitor, so I organize a schedule and prioritize my jobs. Finally I was awarded with the title of Outstanding League Member.
In my spare time, I enjoy music, sports, especially basketball, and studying the English language.
As for study, I'm a fast learner I didn't know anything about computers before attending a University. It was difficult at first but I studied hard, got high marks and can use it effectively now. I always believe that one can too easily lag behind unless one keeps on learning. In order to improve my English, I often go to English Corner to practice my oral English. I have passed College English Test, Band Six with high marks. However, I know my English has room for improvement. I will continue studying for leisure. Thanks for your attention!
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I have made some improvments. Can you correct it please?
Self-introductionGood afternoon, I am glad to be here. My name is Zengtefei and I'm a senior at Chang’an University. My major is Chemical Engineering.
Generally speaking, I'm an easy-going person and I enjoy communicating with people. I like to make friends,
In my spare time, I enjoy music, sports, especially basketball, and studying
In order to improve my English, I often go to English Corner to practice spoken English.I have passed The College English Test, Band Six with high marks. However, I know my English still has room for improvement so I will continue studying English in my leisure time.(free time)
Other than being slightly shorter - I didn't see any improvements that reflected direct learning from previous corrections. Neal may, but I won't correct this for a third time. If you doubt our corrections are truly improvements and given to you with your only your best interest at heart, then leave the essay unchanged - and good luck to you.
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Finally I was awarded with the title of Outstanding League Member.
As for study, I'm a fast learner. I didn't know anything about computers before attending a University. It was difficult at first but I studied hard, got high marks and can use them effectively now.
In order to improve my English, I often go to English Corner to practice (my oral English). The sentence uses the word 'English' 3 times - if this is a written submission you could probably do without the last 3 words of the sentence.
As for study, I'm a fast learner. I didn't know anything about computers before attending a University. It was difficult at first but I studied hard, got high marks and can use them effectively now.
In order to improve my English, I often go to English Corner to practice (my oral English). The sentence uses the word 'English' 3 times - if this is a written submission you could probably do without the last 3 words of the sentence.
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