Emotion Frugality
It is said that excessive dramas and comic books do harm to the youth, since the quantity of our feelings is limited, we’d better avoid wasting it, instead of being indifferent.
To cry for the death of a flower, to cry for the loss of a friend, to cry for your foolishness, all of the actions are meaningless. In addition, as you meet someone you are really fond of, you will be disappointed to find that you have no ability to love a person with plenty of passions.
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Emotion Frugality
It is said that excessive television dramas and comic books do harm to the youth since the youth are emotionally sensitive and are influenced easily.
(I have crafted a sentence for you.--see pink font)
the quantity of our feelings is limited, we’d better avoid wasting it, instead of being indifferent. <--MADE NO SENSE AT ALL.
Remember~details, repeat, the reader cannot read your mind, and the reader doesn't know what you are taking about. Think of us as strangers and you are giving a speech to us in person.
To cry for the death of a flower to the cry for the loss friend, to cry for your foolishness; all of the actions are meaningless. In addition to that, As you meet someone you are really fond of-- you will be disappointed to find that you have no ability to love a person with plenty of a passions.
STOP EXCESSIVELY USING THE COMMA SLICE!
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Like Robert I'm not too sure of the meaning.
Emotion Frugality
It is said that excessive dramas and comic books do harm to the youth young 1*, since the quantity of our feelings is limited, we’d better avoid wasting it them, (instead of being indifferent 2*).
To cry for the death of a flower, to cry for the loss of a friend, to cry for your foolishness, all of the these actions are meaningless. In addition, as when you meet someone you are really fond of, you will be disappointed to find that you have no ability to love a person with plenty of 3* passions passion.
1* the youth - usually referes to a person. You could say 'the youth of today'
2* not sure what you mean
3* I would prefer 'enough' or 'sufficient'
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there, drama, I mean romance movies or tv-plays, or about wars, death.... "to cry for the dreath of a flower ,"... I mean these kinds of things are the waste of time and energy, we'd better do another things important and make sense. thank you!
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I am reluctant to correct your writing because I am not 100% sure of your intent. I think I understand the point you're trying to make but am a little confused by some of the words you're using.
by "drama" do you mean drama in everyday life or books that contain too much drama (excessive).
when you say "cry for the death of a flower, to cry for the loss of a friend, to cry for your foolishness, all of the actions are meaningless", are you trying to say these things are meaningless because you have already used up all of your emotions on stupid things like comic books?
I do agree with your thoughts, but I want to make sure I understand :)
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