Law of drunken driving (Not wrong but doesn't really sound natural. Maybe 'A New Law for Drink Driving')

Actually (Actually probably isn't the right word. It really suggests 'as a matter of fact'. Do you mean Recently?) , a new law has been announced by traffic police department in our country. It's concerned about (Maybe 'It outlines' or 'It stipulates') strict punishment for drunken driving (We tend to call it 'drink driving'); if someone drinks more than one bottle of beer, that guy ('guy' is very informal, maybe that individual) might can be be thrown into detention house ( Also quite informal. Maybe 'detained') for a fortnight by (I don't quite get the sense here. Is he tested during his detention or is he detained as a result of his testing? 'By' makes it ambiguous. If the first option then it would be 'he is detained for a fortnight FOR testing ... '. If the second, it just has to be clearer 'he is detained if he fails testing with alcohol detectors' or is 'over the legal limit according to the alcohol detectors') testing with alcohol detectors. His license will be revoked as well. It's effective, but we still have lots of regulations nobody like to abide by (follows); I know sometime they try to get away with (the expression is 'get around (the law)' or 'evade punishment')the punishment. But I really think the traffic police should increase their patrols and heavily fine anyone who wants to (? you need a verb here. Or you can say 'goes against...') against the law. Maybe it's too serious (punitive), but a good social order is always built by strict governance.

Law of Drunken Driving Law

Actually, A new drunk driving law has been announced enacted by the traffic police department in our country. It's concerned about strict punishment for drunken driving; It stipulates that if someone drinks more than one bottle of beer, that guy might the offender will be thrown incarcerated into detention house jail for a fortnight if tested positively by testing with alcohol detectors. His license will be revoked as well. It's Effective, but we still have lots of regulations nobody no one would like to abide by; obey them. I know sometime they and try to get away with it the punishment. But I really think believe that the traffic police should increase their patrol and heavily fine anyone who wants to against the law throw the full weight of the book at those offenders/flouting the law/. Maybe it's Too serious, draconian perhaps but a good social order is always built by strict governance to everyone regardless of their position.