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My experience: May 29, 2010 I want to tell my friend about my story. Could you remake that in your style? (reference map: B station ----- I'm here ----------- A station ) Yesterday, I met a woman at the transfer station (subway). She asked me "Which way is the A station?" I don't know exactly so I asked her. "Is it on the way of B station?" She said "Yes, right.". I said, "You can go this way". She said "Thank you, you are so kind" A little while later I found out that was wrong direction. It was exactly opposite direction! I tried to find her but she alredy gone. I coultn't find her. I blamed myself. "Why didn't I think carefully." Then I took a subway and accidently saw the map of subway. I found out that A station is in the opposite direction from B station! Eventually, it was right! I was relax so I could go on my way without worry. It's real story of me yesterday. I hope tell entertainingly the story to my friend in English. Help me. It doesn't matter whether your correct is informal. I prefer informal. Correct it as if you talk to your friend. Thank you.

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My experience: May 29, 2010

I want to tell my friend about my story, could you remake it in your style?

(reference map: B station ----- I'm here ----------- A station )

Yesterday, I met a woman at the transfer station (subway).
She asked me "Which way is the A station?"
I didn''t know exactly ,so I asked her. "Is it on B station?"
She said "Yes, right.". I said, "You can go this way". She said "Thank you, you are so kind"
A little while later I found out that, it was the wrong direction. It was exactly the opposite direction!
I tried to find her, but she was already gone. I couldn't find her anywhere! (you have to add a word to the end of this sentences to make it complete, otherwise it just leavest the readers hanging...)
I blamed myself. "Why didn't I think carefully?"
Then I took a subway, and accidentally happened to look upon the subway map.
I found out that A station is in the opposite direction from B station!
Eventually, I got it right! I relaxed so I could go on my way without worrying.
This is a real story, that happened yesterday.

I hope to tell this story to my friend , and entertain him\her. Help me?
It doesn't matter to me if your correction is in informal or formal, I prefer formal anyways.
Correct it as if you were talking to your friend. Than kyou.
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ㅠ ㅠ (crying) It's too dificult to explain the situation but I'll do my best !!!! Can you see my photo? This is map of Seoul subway stations. It consists of 14 lines so it's very complicated, especially for aged people. It would be a maze if you were at transfer station. There was a old lady who didn't know which way to go. A station was her destination. I was aware that A is on the line No. 2. I guided her because it was on my way. Then we reached a fork. There were two stairs. --(stairs)------ (The third basement) │ │ >>>>(train "C")>>>>>>>>(The third basement) me & old lady ( the second basement ) -----│ │ │ <<<<<(train "D")<<<<<<< (The third basement) │ ---(stairs)------ (The third basement) If you choose one of two and walk down the stairs, you'll get on the train bound for C. Otherwise, you'll get on the train bound for D. I didn't know where A is bound for. If you know terminal's ( the last station ) name of which you want to go, you'll choose the direction easily. Because only terminal and major stations are written in the sign. I thought she was aware of terminal's name and I asked "Is it bound for C ?" then she said "Maybe that's right." So I told her confidently "You can get there by going this way". Later on, I found out that was wrong the direction. It was my mistake! I to
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Hehe nice story ShinDonggeun.. 그리고 영어말 무지 잘하네요~
This is how I would tell my friends that kind of story...


Yesterday, I met a woman at the transfer station (subway).  She asked me "Which way is the A station?" 
There was this chick at the station, asking me directions to A.
If the woman is old, I would say lady or old lady.

I don't know exactly so I asked her. "Is it on the way of B station?"
-I had no idea so I asked her, "Do you know if it's on the way to B?"
-I didn't know so I asked her, "Do you know if it's on the way to B?"
We frequently will drop "station" as we know we are talking about stations.

She said "Yes, right.". I said, "You can go this way". She said "Thank you, you are so kind"
She says "Yeh", so I told her to go this way.  Anyway, she said "Thanks, you're so kind, blah blah blah" 

A little while later I found out that was wrong direction. It was exactly opposite direction!
-Then I found out it was in the wrong direction.. it was the other way..
-Later on, I found out it was in the wrong direction.. it was the other way..

I tried to find her but she alredy gone. I coultn't find her. I blamed myself. "Why didn't I think carefully."
So I had a look around to try to find her but she was gone.. you know..
-Coz I kinda felt bad about it.
-Coz I sorta felt bad about it.
kinda = kind of (colloquial) ~ kind-dah
sorta = sort of (colloquial) - sort-tah
coz = because
you know  = indicating cause and effect (in speech) to add emphasis on "because"

Then I took a subway and accidently saw the map of subway. I found out that A station is in the opposite direction from B station! Eventually, it was right! I was relax so I could go on my way without worry.
I got on the train and checked out the station map.. and I realised that A wasn't the other way anyway.. haha.. so it was all good.





 

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My experience: May 29, 2010

I want to tell my friend about something that happened to me. Could you remake that in your style?

(reference map: B station ----- I'm here ----------- A station )

Yesterday, I met a woman at the transfer station (subway).
and she asked me "Which way is the A station?"
I didn't know exactly, so I asked her, "Isn't it on the way to B station?"  < you told her it was the same direction as the B station. Why wyould  you ask her this if she didn't know where A station is?

She said "Yes, that's right.". < then did she know where A station was? 
I said, "You can get there by going this way".  < and you pointed in the direction of B station right?
She said "Thank you, you are so kind."
A little while later I found out that was wrong the direction.
In fact, the A station was actually in the opposite direction!

I tried to find her to tell her but she was aready gone and I couldn't find her.
I blamed myself.  I thought, "Why didn't I think about that more carefully?!"

But then later I took the subway and accidently saw the map of subway system.
I found out that A station really is in the opposite direction from B station! < but you told her to go in the same direction as B station so why was this a good discovery?

Eventually, it was right! I was relax so I could go on my way without worry. < No, you were still wrong.  The A station is in the opposite direction and you told her to go in the same direction as B station.  So why did this relieve you?
It's real story of me yesterday.

Well, my notes are in blue.  The story doesn't make sense logically.  She wanted to go to A station and you told her to go the same direction, same way to get to B station.  But then later the subway system map said A station is in opposite of B station... so you told her the wrong direction - right?   Sorry maybe I don't undertstand the story like you told it, but I corrected in RED.  SORRY about it, am I confused?  I know writing isn't easy --- KEEP GOING YOUR DOING GREAT!  :) ^^  정말 수고했어!!!

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