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Is It Fair? Doesn't matter if there is lots of obstacles between us I will pass them Doesn’t matter if there is seas, between us, doesn't matter, I will pass them Doesn't matter if the heat of sun is burning, I will come, and I'll pass it Doesn't matter if the cold of winter might kill me, I'll come Doesn't matter if the passing of time will pour the white color on my hair Doesn't matter, I will come If the way is rocky, doesn't matter, if my legs are injured, if my bones are quaked, if I bend, I will come If all of mountains have stood between us I will come I don't care I, will come! I will take these entire obstacles Doesn’t matter, I will come! Now, my dear, see I crossed the entire road, can't you see? What is this? Why you put this mirror in front of me? What do you want to show? To show that I am obstacle, do you? I never imagined Myself?! I tame seas, I crossed the heat, I crush the mountains I became old; tell me if it is fair? Tell me dear! I dealt with all obstacles, but this one is "me", how can I deal with this? How can put myself away? It is not fair that you are implying to me! You just pointed to all of me! How can I deal with it? How can I pass this step! When I am full of myself? Become fill of you and vacant of myself, do you? I know what you want! I know! now, I am wondering if I can deal with it?

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Eh, what'is this?
Why you Putting this mirror in front of me?
What do are you want trying to show?
To show that I am that obstacle ain't I, do you? Usually I avoid this word.  It's not proper in most cases but is most appropriate here. This word is always used by the uneducated lower classes etc.  However, at this juncture, you are a fool, not realizing that you are your own obstacle.  A sort of humility that you are casting on yourself.

Nary have I ever imagined that myself...I never imagined
Myself?!
I tamed the seas;

I crossed the heat;

I crushed the mountains

And I had become old!

Tell me if it this is fair?

Tell Answer me truthfully dear! ["Answer" is more demanding than just "tell".]

I dealt with To all obstacles,

A conqueror that I am but this one... is "me"!,

How can I to deal with myself this?
How can I put myself away?
It is not fair that you are implying to me!
You just pointed to all of at me!
How can shall I deal with it?

How can I pass this step can be passed?
When I am so full of myself?
Become fill of you and vacant of myself, do you? [Don't understand what you wrote, so I am guessing.]

How shall I empty myself?

I know what you want!

I know can feel it!
now, I am wondering if I can deal with it?

Now that I understand,

How shall I deal with it?

 

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Is It Fair?

Doesn't matter if there is are lots of obstacles between us I will pass them

The verb must agree with the subject. singular subjects go with plural verbs.

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Is It Fair?

Doesn't matter if there is are lots of obstacles between us, I will pass overcome them
Doesn’t matter if there is are seas, between us, doesn't matter, I will pass overcome them
Doesn't matter if the sun's heat of sun is burning, I will overcome, and I'll pass it
Doesn't matter if the cold of winter might kill me, I'll overcome
Doesn't matter if the passing of time will pour the whitens color on my hair Doesn't matter, I will overcome
If the way is rocky, it doesn't matter; if my legs are injured, if my bones are quaked quaking, or if I bend am bent, I will overcome
If all of the mountains have stood stand between us, I will overcome.
I don't care, I, will overcome!
I will take endure all these entire obstacles.

Doesn’t matter, I will overcome!

Now, my dear, see look!
I have crossed the entire road, can't you see?
What is this?
Why do you put this mirror in front of me?
What do you want to show?
To show that I am an obstacle, do you?
I never imagined.
Myself?!
I tamed the seas, I crossed endured the heat, I crushed the mountains,
I became old; tell me if it is fair? Tell me, Dear!
I dealt with all the obstacles, but this one is "me myself". How can I deal with this?
How can I put myself away?
It is not fair that what you are implying to me!
You just pointed to all of me!
How can I deal with it? How can I pass this step!
When am I am full of myself?
Become fill full of you and vacant of empty myself, do you?
I know what you want! I know!
Now, I am wondering if I can deal with it.

 

This is poetic, so many grammar considerations can be overlooked.

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thank you dear Amrita!
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elina! You are lucky that u have found 'yourself'. Search of "Me" or "Myself" is tough. It's actually tough to know and understand ourselves in this life but most of the time we try to know and understand others. well done! nice poem. keep it up.

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