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Could you correct my english in this text please? When I get older I would like to look back and see a complete life. I would like to have children and grandchildren, and a good health in order to can enjoy them. Also I would like to have a confortable life, I mean, I don´t need to be a rich person, but i won´t want be worried about money in that age. I think at least it´s important have paid my mortgage and a good pension that allow me paid bills, food, cloths and so on and enjoying leisure, maybe travelling or going out with friends. I like to be as active as possible. I´m concerned about my hereditary family arthritis. My parents and my grandparents have this problem, overall it affect their knees so their mobility and quality of life aren´t so good as they want. Mobility is very important for me too so that is the thing I am more worried about.

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Could Can you please correct my English in this text please?

 

When I get become older, I would like to look back and see a complete life. I would like to have see my children and grandchildren, and a all in good health so that we can spend our time in happiness and joy. in order to can enjoy them.

Also I would like to have a confortable life. , I mean, I don´t need to be a rich person, but neither would I won´t want be worried to worry about money in at that age. I think at least it´s important to have paid my mortgage paid up and with a good pension that allows me me to enjoy life like eating well and able to buy things without worries. Perhaps a travel here or there and be able to go out with friends.  paid bills, food, cloths and so on and enjoying leisure, maybe travelling or going out with friends. I like want to be as active as possible.

However, I am also concerned about my hereditary family arthritis. My parents and my grandparents all have this problem.  , Overall it affects their knees and so their mobility and quality of life suffered aren´t so good as they want. Mobility is very important for me. It is my greatest concern. too so that is the thing I am more worried about.

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Could you correct my english in this text please?

When I get older, I would like to look back and see a complete life. I would like to have children and grandchildren, and  good health in order to can enjoy them.
I would also like to have a comfortable life.

I don't mean I need to be a rich person, but i wouldn't want be worried about money at that age.

I think it´s important to have paid off my mortgage, have a good pension that allows me to pay bills, buy food, clothes and so on, while enjoying my leisure, maybe travelling or going out with friends. I like to be as active as possible.

I´m concerned about my hereditary family arthritis. My parents and my grandparents have this problem, overall it affects their knees, so their mobility and quality of life aren´t as good as they would want.

My mobility is very important to me , so that's a thing I am also worried about.

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Could you correct my english in this text please?

When I get older I would like to look back and see a completed life. I would like to have children and grandchildren, and a good health in order to can enjoy them.

Also I would like to have a comfortable life, I mean, I don´t need to be a rich person, but i won´t want be worried about money at that age. I think at least it´s important have paid my mortgage and have a good pension that allows me paid bills, food, clothes and so on and enjoying leisure, maybe travelling or going out with friends. I like to be as active as possible.

I´m concerned about my hereditary family arthritis. My parents and my grandparents have this problem, overally it affects their knees so their mobility and quality of life aren´t so good as they want. Mobility is very important for me too so that is the thing I am more worried about.

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maybe your words in "I like to be as active as possible", can be replaced by "I would like to be as active as possible" Also, "overall it affect their knees..........", would be better if you type :"overall it affects their knees...." because "it" is followed by "verb+s/es" if it is in present tense. but I think, it's not because grammar mistakes, but you just forgot to type the correct one.maybe because you typed it fast until you missed the grammar, But overall I think your English is good, very good. :D

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