Can you please check these phrases

Noun Phrases

The girl had exceptionally pretty hair.
特意漂亮头发的女孩
那个女孩（妞）有一头特别（异常）漂亮的头发。

The shops cakes are the sweetest.
最糖的商店一块蛋糕

那个店的蛋糕味道最甜美。

The computer was the newest on the market
新在市场的电脑

这台电脑是市面上的最新款。

Ding Yun’s coat was very expensive.
丁云很贵的外套

丁云的外套非常的昂贵。

The desk was old and worn.
旧和破的桌子
这张桌子又旧又破。

Aspect Phrases ;-）

Because it was late, the children were returning home
因为就晚了，孩子们回家着
因为天色已经晚了，孩子们正赶着回家呢。

The teacher had told the students to sit
一个老师告诉了学生坐了

老师叫学生们坐下来。

The people started to fight
人民开始就战了

人民开始战斗了。

He was reading aloud, but it was clearly wrong
他朗读着，但是显然错了

他高声的朗读着，不过很明显这是不对的。

“I will pay you back tomorrow”
“我明天将要还你”
明天我会还给你的。

Can you please check these phrases

Noun Phrases

The girl had exceptionally pretty hair.
特意漂亮头发的女孩 --这个女孩拥有特别漂亮的头发（or这个女孩的头发特别漂亮）

The shops cakes are the sweetest.
最糖的商店一块蛋糕--这家店的蛋糕是最甜的 （or这家店的蛋糕最甜）

The computer was the newest on the market
新在市场的电脑 --这台电脑在市场上是最新的

Ding Yun’s coat was very expensive.
丁云很贵的外套 --丁芸的外套很贵（or 丁芸的外套非常贵）

The desk was old and worn.
旧和破的桌子 --这张桌子又旧又破.
 

Aspect Phrases ;-）

Because it was late, the children were returning home
因为就晚了，孩子们回家着 --因为很晚了，所以孩子们要回家了（in chinese，we always say：因为...所以...）

The teacher had told the students to sit
一个老师告诉了学生坐了 --老师叫（告诉or让）学生们坐下来了.

The people started to fight
人民开始就战了 --人民开始了战斗

He was reading aloud, but it was clearly wrong
他朗读着，但是显然错了 --他在大声朗读，但是那明明是错的.

“I will pay you back tomorrow”
“我明天将要还你”this one is literally correct --I would say ：我明天还给你. moreover ,pay back has another meaning, which is 报复 报仇.  Some day I'll pay you back for this ，总有一天我会为此报复你的。

Can you please check these phrases

Noun Phrases

The girl had exceptionally pretty hair.
特意漂亮头发的女孩--→女孩拥有特别漂亮的头发。

The shops cakes are the sweetest.
最糖的商店一块蛋糕  --→ 这家店里的蛋糕最甜。

The computer was the newest on the market
新在市场的电脑   --→  这台电脑是市场上最新的。

Ding Yun’s coat was very expensive.
丁云很贵的外套   --→  丁云的外套很贵。

The desk was old and worn.
旧和破的桌子   --→  又旧又破的桌子。


Aspect Phrases ;-）

Because it was late, the children were returning home
因为就晚了，孩子们回家着   --→因为晚了，孩子们就回家了。  

The teacher had told the students to sit
一个老师告诉了学生坐了   --→  老师让学生坐下。

The people started to fight
人民开始就战了   --→  人民开始了战斗。

He was reading aloud, but it was clearly wrong
他朗读着，但是显然错了   --→  他大声朗读，但显然是错了。

“I will pay you back tomorrow”
“我明天将要还你”  --→ 我明天还给你。