Today's diary: Diligence rules! (click me~:D)

One of my closest friends told me some good news today.

He actually got accepted to all of the five of the universities that he'd applied to.

I was even more excited than he was to hear the news, (upon hearing the news/when hearing the news) that because I knew how hard he'd tried get in.

He'd been gone through annoying mathmatical formulas, an exasperating amount of books and he even had to put up with other people's discouraging remarks while preparing for the entrance exam.

I talked with him about a lot of things (stuff) today while eating great food at a (local) restauant. 

Anyway I was so happy to hear the(his) news that it inspired me to work study even harder!

I'd welcome any comments or advice you may(might) have.
And If any of these expressions sound weird, please correct it or let me know (feel free to let me know) a better one!
Thanks a million! XD

여기에는 영어의 일기를  쓸 때  이모티콘을 쓰지 마세요.

문장의시작부분에  이들단어들을결코쓰지마세요. > but, so, and, or

At the beginning of the sentence do not write these words, ever. > But, so, and, or

영어의문어을위한이들이단어들을 (coordinating conjuctions이라고한다)   문장에두부분함께에가입할거에요.  그들이:  but, so, and or <<<<  

and - (They ate) and (drank).

or - (He will be here on Monday) or (Tuesday).

but - (She is small) but (strong).

so- (I was tired) so (I went to sleep).

이들단어들은문장의중이에찾을항상볼게요. 항상.

제게 "감사합니다"다고 말하가 필요 없어요. 

대신에는, 시간이 있을 때마다, 단 제 다음 글에 좀 봐 주실래요.  

수정된 부분에  다른 색갈을 사용해 주세요. 

수정된 부분에  색을 사용해주시기 바래요.

감사합니다. 낸시로보터

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그건대문자로써야합니다. 

바꿔쓸수있는표현은제가추천하는더자연스럽고일반적인방법의표현입니다.

오타, 또는수정이필요한부분그리고단어의순서, 단어의선택이나철자를고쳤습니다. 

밑줄이있을때는알맞은구두점과띄어쓰기를사용해주세요.

보라색이저의코멘트입니다.

------ (이것이도움이됐으면좋겠습니다)

안녕하세요!

X - Correction      O - Suggestion         I - Comments

Today's diary: Diligence rules! (click me~:D)

One of my closest friends brought me a happy news. ==> One of my closest friends shared some good news.

He actually had gotten admissions from all of the five universities that he'd applied to. ==> He got admitted to all five universities that he applied to!

I was much more excited to hear that because I knew how hard he'd worked out for entering in. (당신는 친구보다 더 행복했어요?) ==> I was more excited than he was to hear that because I knew how hard he worked to get into those universities.

He'd been gone through annoying mathematical formulas, exasperating stacks of books, other peoples' stinking looks towards him (because it seemed to him that it's pratically impossible for him) when he'd been preparing for the exam. Did other people look at him like he couldn't succeed? ==> He had gone through annoying mathematical formulas, millions of books and the disbelieveing stares of others who doubted that he would succeed while he was preparing for his exams.

We'd talked about a lots of stuffs today in a restaurant with stacks of freshly-pressed meals. I personally don't know what freshly-pressed meals mean. Did you mean freshly prepared? ==> We talked about a lot of things today while we were in a restaurant that served freshly-made meals.

Anyway I was so happy to hear the news and it could be a motive for me to study harder! ==> Anyway, I was so happy to hear the news. This motivated me to study harder!

- Any comments and advices would be welcomed! Including title! - ==> I wholeheartedly agree with the title ^^
And if there're any expressions sound weird, please let me know better one! 

Thanks a million! XD ==> 아니요, 저는 당신을 "감사합니다" 말해야 돼요. ^^