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The Famous Movie Star, Jackie Chan
Jackie Chan is a famous movie star. He is from Hong Kong, China 1. When he was a little boy, he was very naughty, so and his father was often mad at him. So Jackie received many beatings at the hands of his father. and hit him. He likes Chinese Kongfu. 2
Jackie Chan isn't is not that good looking handsome enough and he is a bit short. However his love for kungfu gave him a start in the movies and is good in his roles. Otherwise he does well in playing movies. All his movies are popular in the world. They are His movies are action and comedy types. movies.
It is just because of His excellent performances appreciated world wide, that he is well-known all around the world especially in Hollywood. Now he is one of the greatest stars in the world.
I like his movies and I like the a good star. Jackie Chan is a good star, too.
Bless you, Jackie Chan.3
1. Hong Kong is world famous too. All educated and knowlegeable people knows where it is. So you don't need to suffix it with a country, just like Beijing or Shanghai.
2. His love of kungfu (which is Chinese, so prefixing with Chinese is redundant) is of no connection to the previous sentence unless you are implying that he likes kungfu to fend himself off against is father and the beatings he received. It is better to put that information somewhere else for connection like I did.
3. In English, it is strange to see such kind of felicitations. It is ok in Chinese but in English. It betrays you of your roots. At the same time, it makes the reader think you are some religious nut. In having a good conclusion, you don't need such stuff, otherwise it is "painting a snake with legs". Sorry my main computer is dead. No Chinese software to write in.
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