Halloween party

(This is my homework, and our teacher suggested us to ask someone correct our mistakes before we handing it in it. I really need your help, thanks! )

Last Monday, I went to MU1 to join in for a Halloween party with my friend Huan last Monday. I was dressed up like as a cute witch wearing a black dress, putting complete with a fake a black cat with and a red cravat toy on my head, and putting on an over appropriate makeup. Everyone there could get attendee received a little bag to collect candies to be obtained from four ”trick or treat” tables although even though we were not little children. By On seeing what roles did the crowd play how the party revellers were dressed, I was really surprised by their strong vivid imaginations. For example, there was a boy with a green lamp hanging over his head tried to acting like the person in SIMS. We danced together to music, and took a lot of many photos.  I suppose the reason why we were active in taking photos with others is not only because we tried to leave us some precious memories, but also because we wanted to share the interesting experience with our parents and friends who have no chance to come to America. that I took so many pictures was that I wanted to have some record of this wonderful experience and to send them back home for our parents and friends who did not have the chance to visit the US.

1.  What is MU?  Mississippi University, Michigan University, Miami University or the Moomoo University? You need to spell it out in full! 

Halloween party

(This is my homework, and our teacher suggest us to ask someone correct our mistakes before we hand in it. I really need your help, thanks! )

I went to MU to attend a Halloween party with my friend Huan last Monday. I dressed up like a cute witch wearing a black dress, putting a black cat with a red cravat toy on my head, and putting on an over makeup. Everyone there could get a little bag to collect candies obtained from four ”trick or treat” tables although we were not little children. By seeing what roles did the crowd play, I was really surprised by their strong imaginations. For example, a boy with a green lamp hanging over his head tried to act like the person in SIMS. We danced together to music and took a lot of photos. I suppose the reason why we were active in taking photos with others is not only because we tried to capture some precious memories, but also because we wanted to share the interesting experience with our parents and friends who have no chance to come to America.

Good job! There were only a few awkward words that we wouldn't quite say that way. Welcome to America, I hope you enjoy your stay.

Halloween party

(This is my homework, and our teacher suggest us to ask someone correct our mistakes before we hand in it. I really need your help, thanks! )

I went to MU to join in a Halloween party with my friend Huan last Monday. I dressed up like a cute witch wearing [a] black dress, putting [on] a black cat (are you sure it is not a "hat"?) with [a] red cravat toy on my head, and putting on an over [some] makeup. Everyone there could get a little bag to collect candies obtained from four ”trick or treat” tables although we were not little children. By s Seeing what roles did the crowd play[ed], I was really surprised by their strong imaginations. For example, a boy with a green lamp hanging over his head tried to act like the person in SIMS. We danced together to music, and took a lot of photos; I suppose the reason why we were active[ly] in taking photos with others is not only because we tried to leave us [keep] some precious memories, but also because we wanted to share the interesting experience with our parents and friends who have no chance to come to America.

"seeing what roles the crowd played"  - is difficult to understand. I would suggest "what costumes the crowd wore" instead.

In all nicely written.

Halloween Party

(This is my homework, and our teacher suggested us we to ask someone to correct our mistakes before we hand it in it. I really need your help. Thanks! )

I went to MU to join participate in a Halloween party with my friend Huan last Monday. I dressed up like a cute witch, wearing a black dress, putting placing a black cat with a red cravat toy on my head, and putting on an over make-up. Everyone there could would get a little bag to collect candies obtained from four ”trick-or-treat” tables, although we were are not little children. By Seeing what the various roles did the crowd played, I was really surprised by their strong imaginations imagination. For example, a boy with a green lamp hanging over his head tried to act like the person in SIMS. Together we danced to the music together to music, and took a lot of photos. I suppose the reason why we were so active in taking photos with others is was not only because we tried to leave us keep some precious memories, but also because we wanted to share the interesting experience with our parents and friends who have no chance to come to America.