My Trip to Beijing (Fictional)

Hi! Please help me correct my spelling and grammar. =) I have never been to Beijing but I have to write about it for my assignment. ^_^

曉雨， 你好！

你最近怎么样？
        上个月我去北京了。而且，我以前也去过北京。我真的喜欢这个城市。北京是中国的首都，。北京位于中国的北部。我坐飞机去的北京，用了坐了十二个多小时。

在北京的时候，我参观了故宫，。故宫是很有趣的地方，因为故宫里有很多漂亮的收藏品（艺术品）对象。

当我中国的时候，我真的喜欢在夜市购物和吃中国蛋炒饭。不过我不是很恨喜欢北京的天气， 北京夏天的天气太热！

但我还想去南京，可是时间不够了。

在中国的时候我很放松，。所以，我想再次去一次中国！

明年我打算去南京，。你去过南京吗？。你想和我一起去吗？
回头见！

心美
二零一一年 九月二十八日

This is what I'm trying to say:
Hi Xiaoyu!

How are you?

Last month I went to Beijing. I have been to Beijing before. I really like this city. Beijing is the capital of China and is located in the north of China. I flew to beijing in a plane. The journey took 12 hours.

In Beijing I visited the Forbidden City. The Forbidden City is a very interesting place with many beautiful objects (or artifacts?).

When I was in China I really liked shopping at the night market and eating Chinese fried rice. But I did not like the weather, it was too hot!

I also wanted to go to Nanjing but I did not have time.

When I was in China I was very relaxed so I want to go again.

I plan to go to Nanjing next year. Have you been to Nanjing before? Do you want to come with me?

See you soon!

Xinmei

28 September 2011

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Thank you for your help!!

My Trip to Beijing (Fictional)

Hi! Please help me correct my spelling and grammar. =) I have never been to Beijing but I have to write about it for my assignment. ^_^

亲爱的小雨，

　　你好！

　　你最近生活怎么样？

　　上个月我去北京玩了一趟。其实我以前去过北京，我发觉自己真的很喜欢这个城市。北京是中国的首都，北京位于中国北部。我坐飞机去的北京，坐了十二多个多小时。 

　　在北京的时候我参观了故宫。故宫真的是个很有趣的地方，因为故宫里面有很多漂亮的对象建筑。 

　　当我在中国的时候，我真的超级喜欢在夜市购物和，吃中国那儿的蛋炒饭。不过我不恨是很喜欢北京的天气， 北京的天气太热了！

　　但本来我还想去南京玩，可惜是时间不够了。

　　在中国的时候我整个人都很放松。所以将来有机会，我还想再次去一次中国！ 

　　明年我打算去南京。你去过南京吗？你想愿意和我一起去吗？

　　期望到时能够见到你哦！

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　你的朋友：心美 

　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　　2010年 9月28日 

This is what I'm trying to say:
Hi Xiaoyu!

How are you?

Last month I went to Beijing. I have been to Beijing before. I really like this city. Beijing is the capital of China and is located in the north of China. I flew to beijing in a plane. The journey took 12 hours.

In Beijing I visited the Forbidden City. The Forbidden City is a very interesting place with many beautiful objects (or artifacts?).

When I was in China I really liked shopping at the night market and eating Chinese fried rice. But I did not like the weather, it was too hot!

I also wanted to go to Nanjing but I did not have time.

When I was in China I was very relaxed so I want to go again.

I plan to go to Nanjing next year. Have you been to Nanjing before? Do you want to come with me?

See you soon!

Xinmei

28 September 2011

----------------------
Thank you for your help!!

My Trip to Beijing (Fictional)

Hi! Please help me correct my spelling and grammar. =) I have never been to Beijing but I have to write about it for my assignment. ^_^

曉雨， 你好！
（曉雨：

          你好！）

（Chinese letter style: name at top and greeting words need under the name -- in front of the greeting words need empty two Chinese words's space.）
你怎么样？
上个月我去北京了。我以前去过北京。我真的喜欢这个城市。北京是中国的首都。北京位于中国北部。我坐飞机去的北京，坐了十二(个)多个小时。（This sentence is not wrong,but if Chinese read it... I correct the sentence is better for read it.）

在北京的时候(，)我参观了故宫。故宫是很有趣的地方（，）因为故宫里有很多漂亮的对象（object = 物品；artifact = 文物。Use "文物" is better.Beacause your mean is accuracy）。

当我(在)中国的时候（，）我真的喜欢在夜市购物和吃中国蛋炒饭。不过我不恨（很。“恨”= hate ）喜欢北京的天气， 北京的天气太热！

但我还想去南京，可是时间不够了。

在中国的时候我很放松。所以我想再次去中国！

明年我打算去南京。你去过南京吗？。(<--This period need delete)你想和我一起去吗？
回头见！

心美
二零一一年 九月二十八日

This is what I'm trying to say:
Hi Xiaoyu!

How are you?

Last month I went to Beijing. I have been to Beijing before. I really like this city. Beijing is the capital of China and is located in the north of China. I flew to beijing in a plane. The journey took 12 hours.

In Beijing I visited the Forbidden City. The Forbidden City is a very interesting place with many beautiful objects (or artifacts?).

When I was in China I really liked shopping at the night market and eating Chinese fried rice. But I did not like the weather, it was too hot!

I also wanted to go to Nanjing but I did not have time.

When I was in China I was very relaxed so I want to go again.

I plan to go to Nanjing next year. Have you been to Nanjing before? Do you want to come with me?

See you soon!

Xinmei

28 September 2011

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Thank you for your help!!

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Lovely Hybrid, you writed the story is good and your Chinese is good too!

My Trip to Beijing (Fictional)

Hi! Please help me correct my spelling and grammar. =) I have never been to Beijing but I have to write about it for my assignment. ^_^

曉雨， 你好！

你最近怎么样？
上个月我去北京了。我以前去过北京。我真的很喜欢这个城市。北京是中国的首都。北京位于中国北部。我坐飞机去的北京，坐了十二多个小时。

在北京的时候我参观了故宫。故宫是很有趣的地方因为故宫里有很多漂亮的古建筑（对象？？）。

当我在中国的时候我真的很喜欢在夜市购物和吃中国蛋炒饭。不过我很不恨喜欢北京的天气， 北京的天气太热！

但我还想去南京，可是时间不够了。

在中国的时候我很放松。所以我想再次去中国！

明年我打算去南京。你去过南京吗？。你想和我一起去吗？
回头见！

心美
二零一一年 九月二十八日

This is what I'm trying to say:
Hi Xiaoyu!

How are you?

Last month I went to Beijing. I have been to Beijing before. I really like this city. Beijing is the capital of China and is located in the north of China. I flew to beijing in a plane. The journey took 12 hours.

In Beijing I visited the Forbidden City. The Forbidden City is a very interesting place with many beautiful objects (or artifacts?).

When I was in China I really liked shopping at the night market and eating Chinese fried rice. But I did not like the weather, it was too hot!

I also wanted to go to Nanjing but I did not have time.

When I was in China I was very relaxed so I want to go again.

I plan to go to Nanjing next year. Have you been to Nanjing before? Do you want to come with me?

See you soon!

Xinmei

28 September 2011

----------------------
Thank you for your help!!

My Trip to Beijing (Fictional)

Hi! Please help me correct my spelling and grammar. =) I have never been to Beijing but I have to write about it for my assignment. ^_^

曉雨， 你好！

你怎么样？
上个月我去北京了。我以前去过北京。我真的喜欢这个城市。北京是中国的首都。北京位于中国北部。我坐飞机去的北京，坐了十二多个小时。

在北京的时候我参观了故宫。故宫是很有趣，的地方因为故宫里有很多漂亮的艺术珍品对象。

当我在中国的时候，我真的喜欢在夜市购物和吃中国蛋炒饭。不过我不恨很喜欢北京的天气， 北京的天气太热！

但我还想去南京，可是时间不够了。

在中国的时候我很放松。所以我想再次去中国！

明年我打算去南京。你去过南京吗？。你想和我一起去吗？
回头见！

心美
二零一一年 九月二十八日

This is what I'm trying to say:
Hi Xiaoyu!

How are you?

Last month I went to Beijing. I have been to Beijing before. I really like this city. Beijing is the capital of China and is located in the north of China. I flew to beijing in a plane. The journey took 12 hours.

In Beijing I visited the Forbidden City. The Forbidden City is a very interesting place with many beautiful objects (or artifacts?).

When I was in China I really liked shopping at the night market and eating Chinese fried rice. But I did not like the weather, it was too hot!

I also wanted to go to Nanjing but I did not have time.

When I was in China I was very relaxed so I want to go again.

I plan to go to Nanjing next year. Have you been to Nanjing before? Do you want to come with me?

See you soon!

Xinmei

28 September 2011

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Thank you for your help!!