About 15 years old girl, that saved her father from starvation and death
If something went wrong, they couldn't their hometown. The bicycle didn't suitable for long-distance. Highly likelihood, that this bike could be broken. For 15 years old girl overcome the distance with cargo - this incredible.
How many people did die from starvation and weakness?
I think that society should be focusing on problem of poverty. And the government was should support people to return to their hometown.
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About 15 years old girl, that saved her father from starvation and death
When describing a person of a specific age, there is no need to use the plural for the word "year". So you can just say "a 15/16/etc year old". In case you wanted to write your title to sound like a news headline, you could change it into something like "15 year old girl saves her father from starvation and death". If you wanted, you could also ommit the "that" before saved.
If something went wrong, they couldn't return to their hometown.
I think there is a verb missing here after couldn't - maybe go back or return?
The bicycle didn't wasn't suitable for long-distances.
To do/did is an auxiliary verb that modifies another verb. Here, you would use only the verb to be in the past tense.
There was a highly likelihood, that this bike could be broken. For a 15 years old girl overcome the distance with cargo - this is incredible.
For the beginning of the sentence, you could say either "there was a high likelihood" or 'it was highly likely". Also, if you mean to say that the bike already had a problem and couldn't function properly before they started riding it, you would say "that this bike could be broken". If you mean that the bike would stop working during their journey, you would say "that this bike would break". The last sentence requires a verb.
How many people did die from starvation and weakness?
I think that society should be focusing on the problem of poverty. And the government was should support people to in returning to their hometowns.
Here, you don't need another auxiliary verb with should - so you don't need to use "was" as well.
Hope this was helpful!
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This is about a 15 year old girl, who saved her father from starvation and death
If something went wrong, they couldn't return to their hometown. The bicycle was not suitable for long-distance, and it is highly likely that this bike could break (you could use “fall apart” too). For a 15 year old girl, to overcome the distance with cargo is incredible.
How many people have died from starvation and weakness? Past perfect tense could be used here!
I think that society should be focusing on the problem of poverty. And the government should support people to return to their hometown. Return to the present tense
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