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Devya05
Sunday Yesterday, I woke up around 7am. I had a light breakfast and took a shower. Then, I helped mum to cook. Like every Sunday, meal is a big deal. My mum asked me to open a bottle of wine. I've never opened one before. So I cut myself when I was trying to open the bottle of wine. My mum was in fits of laughter. I guess now I'll have a good story to tell to my friends. Then, my mother made a chocolate cake for dessert. And I made some cookies for the week. Hopefully, it will last longer than last time. After that, we had lunch all together. During the afternoon, I read a book and talked to my friends. My mum and my sister watched a TV series on Netflix. My dad took a nap. And my brothers played PS4.

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Hi Devya--great job!

I removed most of the commas after introductory adverbs like "then" and "hopefully." I wish there were a simple rule I could tell you here, but I can only tell you that in each of these instances it seems intuitively to me that they are better without the comma. See further discussion here: https://english.stackexchange.com/a/236518

While it is possible to start a new sentence with "and," it's usually done to add emphasis. Most of the time you'll want to use "and" without ending the sentence before it, but rather using the "and" to connect two phrases into one longer sentence.

Yesterday, I woke up around 7am. I had a light breakfast and took a shower. Then I helped mum to cook. Like every Sunday, meal is meals are a big deal. My mum asked me to open a bottle of wine. I've I'd never opened one before, so I cut myself when I was trying to open the bottle of wine. My mum was in fits of laughter. I guess now I'll have a good story to tell to my friends. Then my mother made a chocolate cake for dessert and I made some cookies for the week. Hopefully it they will last longer than last time. After that, we all had lunch all together. During the afternoon, I read a book and talked to my friends. My mum and my sister watched a TV series on Netflix. My dad took a nap and my brothers played PS4.
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It's good stories about your day. Let me introduce myself My name is Damir. 😊

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