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My First Writing Look at the picture.This is my first writing in the App, if you could tell me the wrong with my writing, I will very appreciate with you. Best wish!🤓🤩

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My First Writing

Look at the picture.This is my first writing in the App, if you could tell me the wrong with my writing, I will very appreciate with you. Best wish!🤓🤩

Hi William, the following is how I would write the letter:
Dear Sir/ Madame,
I booked a room of your hotel for my friend John yesterday, unfortunately, he will have to look after(/take care of) his grandmother, therefore wouldn't be able to make it.
He was very excited about going on a trip in our city for the upcoming week, he had sent me several emails about it. Last week, he told me he would like to book a hotel room, so I booked a room of yours. Last night, he called and explained that he'd have to look after his grandmother in the hospital because his parents are busy working at the moment, so he'd have to put off the plan for a week.
If you could help me with re-booking the room, I'd really appreciate it. Please let me know, thank you.

Best wishes
William

Hope this helps! Happy to know if there are any errors in my version too:)
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Hey William, nice writing! A few important things I would correct: -In the first sentence, the way you wrote "yesterday" could mean that the room was booked FOR yesterday or that you booked it yesterday. Try to change the sentence to make it more clear. -When you say, "He would be taken off this plan a week," what did you mean here? Were you trying to say that he would be occupied with this task for a week? -Instead of "Did you help me to revision date of this room," we might say it like "Could you help me to change the date of the reservation?" Your letter was very polite; great job!
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