A kid was humiliate because was selling bonbons
Reading the news this morning on the web, I stumble upon with a news that make me sad.
I little kid was humiliate at a pizza restaurant because he was selling bonbons to help his family.
A woman said to her daughters that if them not study well, them would be like the kid.
The kid said to his parents that he got sad with woman's comment.
His dream is to become a public defender to help poor families and vulnerable people.
This case became famous in the city and many people start to help the kid, offer him, for example, a scolarship in private school till high school.
He is in sixth grade.
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A kid was humiliated because was for selling bonbons
Reading the news this morning on the web, I stumbled upon with a news article that made me sad.
I little kid was humiliated at a pizza restaurant because he was for selling bonbons to help his family.
A woman said to her daughters that if they didn't study well hard, they would be like the kid.
The kid said to his parents that the woman's comment got made him sad with (or "upset him").
His dream is to become a public defender to help poor families and vulnerable people.
This case became famous in the city and many people started to help the kid, offering him, for example, a scholarship in at a private school until high school.
He is in sixth grade.
Well done, Leandro. Note that "they" is the subject pronoun; "them" is the object pronoun.
Careful with some of verbs being in the past tense.
Keep practicing! Simón.
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A Little Boy Was Humiliated for Selling Bonbons
Reading the news this morning on the web, I came upon with a story that made me sad. A little boy, who is only in the sixth grade, was humiliated at a pizza restaurant simply because he was selling bonbons to help his family financially. Upon seeing him, a woman there in the restaurant had said to her daughters that if they did not do well in school, then, they would end up like him. The boy later told his parents that he felt both ashamed and sad about the woman's crass comment. It turns out that his dream when he grows up has always been to become a public defender, someone who will help poor families and other vulnerable people. This story gradually became famous throughout the city, and as a result, many people offered to help the poor boy, including even, for example, providing him with a scholarship to a private school until he reaches high school age.*
Hi, Leandro. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify and connect your thoughts, and for ease of reading. My sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you, Jonathan.
*While the word “kid” is synonymous with “child,” it is also informal, thus, similar as to how you would not use slang or obscenities in formal or academic writing, I feel it better to not use it here on Italki, a learning website.
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