Theme park trip
Last time I went to a theme park, was when I was ten/twelve years old. It was a trip with a few friends and an instructor.
I remember the ticket booth was full and we had to wait an huge queue, so we started complaining about it in a childish manner. The ride part happen to be amazing. We scattered among the park and tried every attraction we could, it was fun to see someone of your group in distance. It was a water park and I’ve always been with a group compose of 4-5 boys, we had a lot of fun together and we came out of that drenched.
I remember we had a little trouble eating because it’s important to wait 2-3 hours for doing a bath after, but apart that, everything else was really fun.
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Theme park trip
The last time I went to a theme park, was when I was ten/twelve years old. It was a trip with a few friends and an instructor.
I remember the ticket booth was full and we had to wait an on a huge queue line, so we started complaining about it in a childish manner. The ride part happened to be amazing. We were scattered among the park and tried every attraction we could, and it was fun to see someone of from your group in the distance. It was a water park and I’ve always been was with a group composed of 4-5 boys. We had a lot of fun together and we came out of that it drenched.
I remember we had a little trouble eating because it’s important to wait 2-3 hours after swimming for doing a bath after, but apart aside from that, everything else was really fun.
Ciao Andrea!
Great work, your English is excellent!
The corrections I made were quite minimal, you only have to work on is learning how to use the language in the way someone fluent would speak. (Grammatical)
The edits I made in blue are suggestions on how to sound fluent. It's the way someone fluent (like myself), would say the same thing you said, but in another way which would sound better and be more commonly used.
English is a confusing language, so congrats on speaking it so well!
Sono Jenny, ho 17 anni, e sono di New York.
Non parlo italiano bene però amo la lingua, la cultura, il cibo, e il mio ragazzo italiano moltissimo e queste sono le cause per cui voglio impararlo.
Piacere di conoscerti!
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Theme park trip
The last time I went to a theme park, was when I was ten/twelve years old. It was a trip with a few friends and an instructor.
I remember the ticket booth was full and we had to wait in an huge queue, so we started complaining about it in a childish manner. The ride part happened to be amazing. We scattered among* throughout the park and tried every attraction we could, it was fun to see someone of from your group in the distance. It was a water park, and I’ve always been I was always with a group composed of 4-5 boys, we had a lot of fun together and we came out of that there drenched.
I remember we had a little trouble eating because it’s important to wait 2-3 hours for doing a bath after swimming, but apart from that, everything else was really fun.
*among is better for count nouns
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