My live
I was born in a small family, my parents are from different cities, my mother is from Neiva and my father is from Cartagena, but he has lived most of the time in Barrancabermeja, my parents met when my mother came to a vacation, they had three daughters and I am the youngest, my older sister died when I was a baby, my parents were afraid when I was born because I was born the same day as her.
Since I was little I liked science, so I studied Chemistry, my first job was in a private clinical laboratory, I loved it because every day there was something different, so I did not have a daily routine and I was learning every day, for example a day I could get a stool test and the next day an expermogram, the person really in charge was a bacteriologist, but I was there watching the whole process, but I stopped working there because it was not well paid, then I worked in a Rubiales oil field, I had a pretty heavy routine I got up at 4 am, I had breakfast at 5 and worked from 6am to 6pm, there I worked 15 days and rested for 15 days the work was not so exciting but it was well paid, then there was the oil crisis and it was over work, now I'm studying English because I want to work in research
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My Life
My parents are from different cities. My mother is from Neiva and my father is from Cartagena, but he has lived most of the time in Barrancabermeja, which is where they met when my mother was on a vacation. They had three daughters, of which I am the youngest.
Unfortunately, my oldest sister died when I was just a baby, so my parents, being superstitious, were afraid for me because we shared the same birthday. I have always liked science even from when I was young, so I eventually ended up studying Chemistry, and my first job was in a private clinical laboratory.*
I loved working there because every day I was doing something different, and in that respect, I did not have a daily routine. I was learning something new almost every day, for example, one day I might get a stool test to process, but the next day, an expermogram.** The person who was in charge was a bacteriologist, but I was often there watching the whole process.
However, I eventually stopped working there because it did not pay very well. Later on, I then worked in a Rubiales oil field, where my routine consisted of rather long days. I typically got up at 4 am, had breakfast by 5 am, and then worked--believe it or not--from 6 am to 6 pm!
Furthermore, my schedule was working for 15 straight days, but then, I had the next 15 days off. The work itself was not very exciting, but it did pay well. Regrettably, with the current oil glut, the price of oil has drastically fallen, so that work has ended.
Now, I am studying English because I want to find a job doing research, and most of the most recent literature in my field uses it.***
Hi, Alejandra. Good job! The changes that I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.
*The way that you originally wrote this makes things a bit unclear. Born “the same day” would mean you and your sister are twins, but you are not because you are younger. Born “on the same day” could mean you both were born on a particular day (April 1 or a Monday), but since you did not state it either way, the reader does not know. In changing the sentence to read, instead, that you both shared the same birthday, the month or day no longer matters, yet, the reader easily understands the relationship.
Similarly, you originally used "older" in reference to your sister who died. Yet, being the youngest, both of your sisters are "older" than you. So now, you still have an older sister (the middle one), but it was the oldest one who died. In English, there are three forms of adjectives we use to show varying degrees of comparison: the positive (or regular) - old, the comparative - older, and the superlative - oldest. The number of things you are comparing will dictate which form you should use: I have an old black hat. Now that I think about it, my white hat is older. Actually, it is my blue hat that is the oldest.
**I have no idea what this procedure is, so I left it as is.
***Without stating a reason, there is no correlation between English and research.
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My live Life
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My live life
I was born in into a small family, my parents are from different cities, my mother is from Neiva and my father is from Cartagena, but he has lived most of the time in Barrancabermeja, my parents met when my mother came to on a vacation, they had three daughters and I am the youngest, my older sister died when I was a baby, my parents were afraid when I was born because I was born the same day as her.
Since I was little I liked science, so I studied Chemistry, my first job was in a private clinical laboratory, I loved it because every day there was something different, so I did not have a daily routine and I was learning every day, for example a one day I could get a stool test and the next day an expermogram, the person really in charge was a bacteriologist, but I was there watching the whole process, but I stopped working there because it I was not well paid, then I worked in a Rubiales oil field, I had a pretty heavy busy routine I got up at 4 am, I had breakfast at 5 and worked from 6am to 6pm, there I worked 15 days and rested for 15 days. The work was not so exciting but it was well paid, then there was the oil crisis and it was over work, now I'm studying English because I want to work in research
Most of the places you use a comma "," you would be better off using a period "." and starting a new sentence.
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