An indelible experience (part 1)
My flight to New York was really an indelible experience. When I arrived at the Chicago airport, I received an email and also a text telling me my flight was delayed for about one hour. I thought ok, it was fine, but I didn't predict that the flight would be delayed more than one times. Almost 3 hours later, I finally boarded the plane, but once I sat down, the Captain broadcasted that we need to wait for one more hour to take off. Well, I slept for one hour on the plane, but when I woke up, I waited for another 40 minutes.
At that time, I thought it was acceptable as long as the plane took off, but I never expected that the plane would land on Philadelphia. Because of the bad weather in New York, the plane was delayed again and again, spent more time than usual in the upper air and landed in another city, which really seemed like a disaster.
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An indelible experience (part 1)
My flight (trip) to New York was really an indelible experience. When I arrived at the Chicago airport, I received an email and also a text (+message) telling (informing) me (that) my flight was (has) delayed for about one (an) hour. I thought ok, it (+that) was fine, but I didn't predict (couldn't imagine) that the flight would be delayed more than one times (once). Almost 3 hours later (has passed), I (was) finally boarded (on) the plane, but once I sat down, the Captain broadcasted that we need to wait for one more hour to take off (announced for another delay for the take off). Well, I slept for one hour on the plane, but when I woke up, I waited for another 40 minutes (I slept for an hour and woke up, but the plan was still there, and it actually took 40 more minutes to go).
At that time (In that moment), I thought it was acceptable as long as the plane took off, but I never expected that the plane would land on Philadelphia (+which is thousand miles from New York !). Because of the bad (poor) weather in New York, the plane (flight) was delayed again and again. ( It was really a disaster which I have...) spent more time than usual in the upper air and (+have) landed in another city, which really seemed like a disaster.
TBC :)
Hi
This is not a grammatical correction, I only tried to turn verbal language into written language so it sounds more formal. The blot words are not replacement, they are just alternatives :)
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An indelible experience (part 1)
My flight to New York was really an indelible experience. When I arrived at the Chicago airport, I received an email and also a text telling me my flight was delayed for about one hour. I thought okay (proper spelling), it was fine, but I didn't predict that the flight would be delayed more than one time. Almost 3 hours later, I finally boarded the plane, but once I sat down, the Captain broadcasted that we will/would (future tense) need to wait for one more hour to take off. Well, I slept for one hour on the plane, but when I woke up, I waited for another 40 minutes.
At that time, I thought it was acceptable as long as the plane took off, but I never expected that the plane would land in Philadelphia. Because of the bad weather in New York, the plane was delayed again and again. I spent more time than usual in the upper air and landed in another city, which really seemed like a disaster.
TBC :)
Excellent passage! Your writing is great, minus some very minor grammar points. If you would like more help with your conversation skills and writing, I am a professional teacher on iTalki with extensive availability and I would love to help you.
~Sara
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