Describing a picture. Writing for the school, thanks for your help!
This image is a photograph that was taken in the cinema and shows five young people watching a film. They are in her twenties. The film seems to have already started, because all the scene is dark except for a bright light in the background , the film projector.
The main focus of the photo is the girl sitting in the centre, who is watching something throught the mobile phone.
In my opinion she is in a bad mood, perhaps his boyfriend is angry with her.
Neither the boy sitting on her left nor the boy sitting on her right are watching the film. Apparently they prefer gossiping her phone.
The young who wears a white t-shirt and eating pop corn, might be his brother, because they look physically, especially for their curly hair. Moreover he looks a bit angry, maybe about something he´s reading in the mobile phone of the girl. In the background there is a boy smiling, so I think he is the only person who are enjoying the film.
This photo reminds me my youthness, when I went to the cinema with my best friends, and we did a lot of things instead of watching the film.
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Describing a picture. Writing for the school, thanks for your help!
This image is a photograph that was taken in the cinema and shows five young people watching a film. They are in her their twenties. The film seems to have already started, because all the scene is dark except for a bright light in the background , the film projector.The main focus of the photo is the girl sitting in the centre, who is watching something throught on the mobile phone. 1.
In my opinion she is in a bad mood, perhaps his her boyfriend is angry with her.
Neither the boy sitting on her left nor the boy sitting on her right are watching the film. Apparently they prefer gossiping her phone. 2.
The younger boy who is wearing a white t-shirt and eating pop corn, might be his brother, because they look physically similar, especially for their curly hair. Moreover he looks a bit angry, maybe about something he´s reading in the mobile phone of the girl. In the background there is a boy smiling, so I think he is the only person who are is enjoying the film.
This photo reminds me my youthness, when I went to the cinema with my best friends, and we did a lot of things instead of watching the film.3.
1.This would read better as "...who is looking at something on her mobile phone." We generally use 'looking at' for phones, if we do not know what the person is doing on the phone. She could be watching a video, but she could also be looking at pictures, checking messages, etc.
2.Gossip does not work here.. it is a type of conversation or report. You can again just say 'looking at her phone'.
3. For this last sentence, use 'used to' or 'would' instead of the simple past, since it is something you often did.
A couple minor errors, but otherwise nice work :)
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Describing a picture. Writing for the school, thanks for your help!
This image is a photograph that was taken in the cinema and shows five young people watching a film. They are in their twenties. The film seems to have already started, because the entire scene is dark except for a bright light in the background, the film projector.The main focus of the photo is the girl sitting in the center, who is watching something through the mobile phone.
In my opinion, she is in a bad mood, perhaps his boyfriend is angry with her.
Neither the boy sitting on her left nor the boy sitting on her right are watching the film. Apparently, they prefer gossiping about her phone.
The young boy who wears a white t-shirt and is eating pop corn, might be his brother. This is because they look physically, especially for their curly hair. Moreover, he looks a bit angry, maybe about something he´s reading in the girl's mobile phone. In the background, there is a boy smiling, so I think he is the only person who is enjoying the film.
This photo reminds me of my youth when I went to the cinema with my best friends. We did a lot of other things instead of watching the film.
Good job. I am not sure what you wanted for the highlighted word. One thing to watch out for would be "run-on" sentences that stretch too long. I find breaking them into 2 sentences is better.
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