Share my experience of travel--2

Finally, I will would like to talk about local people's lifestyles. All though Although, There are three major races 1nations——Chinese, Malays2ian and Indians, in Singapore and Malaysia and they can live together in harmony3.  harmoniously. To me, this is make me very impressive. I think China is shortage tolerant there is tolerance and respect in China, so but there are many contradictions in our society, such as the city's people city folks discriminated discriminating against countryman rural folks. Before most of the In the beginning, most of the city population is Chinese and so the Malaysian government enforce "encourages" malaysian people more Malays to moved into the city into urban areas so as to maintain a a more balanced of achieve a multi-ethnic modern society. Nowadays, if you live in Malaysia, then most likely your neighbours will include the wealthy, common peoplethe not so wealthy or some other ethnicity people. In addition, the Malaysia government provides subsidies to citizens4, and to ensure that education and medical needs are free. take measure of free education and medical. Plus, the CPI5 of Malaysia is very low. Based on these factors people's life is very stable and happiness happy.

In my conclusions, I prefer Malaysia, because you will feel more comfortable, and the pace of life is not fast, then you would not feel pressure.Contrast by, singapore people shoulder more pressure. CPI is so high,and no allowance of government. Even you are older you also have to work , because daily cost is so expensive. However, according to my observation these two countries life quality is higher than China,it is no question.China remains a developing country, still some distance away from the developed countries, which need all the Chinese people to effort fulfil it.

1.  Nation and races do not mean the same.  For example, in China there are more than 50 different ethnic races and they consider themselves people of one nation.

2.  Malay is an ethnic race.  Malaysian is a person from the country of Malaysia.  Just like Cantonese, Teocheow, Shanhainese are Chinese who originally came from China but can also be born in other countries.

3.  Or you can say, ".. live harmoniously together".  I'm just correcting your grammar and not the structure of the sentence.

4.  Not really correct.  You have to be a Bumiputra in order to qualify for it.  For example, every company in Malaysia, there must be a guaranteed percentage of Bumipurtras (local Malay) be in upper management regardless if they are qualified or not.  In Singapore, however, there is no such law. 

5.  Need to spell out such abbreviations first.  Not everyone knows what it is unless you are an economics major.  Remember your essay is read by everyone in the world.

Share my experience of travel--2

Finally, I will talk about local people's lives. life. All though there are three major nationnalities——Chinese, Malaysian and Indian, in Singapore and Malaysia, they can live together harmoniously. This is in itself make me very impressive. I think Chinese are a bit is shortage tolerance and respect ,so there are many contradictions in our society,such as like the city's people discriminated against countrymen. Before Earlier most of the city population was is Chinese, so Malaysian government enforced malaysian people to move into the cities to maintain a balanced of multi-ethnicity. Nowadays, if you are living live in Malaysia, then your neighbour will include wealthy people,common people and other ethnic people. In addition, Malaysian government provide subsidies to citizens and take great measures in providing of free education and medical. Plus,CPI of Malaysia is very low. Based on these factors people's life is very stable and happiness.

In my conclusions, I prefer Malaysia because you will feel more comfortable and the pace of life is not that fast, then so you would not feel pressured.Contrast by, compared to singapore people who feel shoulder more pressure. CPI is so high and no allowance from the of government. Even you are older you also have to work , because daily cost is so high. expensive. However, according to my observation these two countries life quality is higher than China, it is no question.China remains a developing country, still some distance away from the developed countries, which need all the Chinese people to make an effort to fulfil it.

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In my conclusions, I prefer Malaysia because you will feel more comfortable, and the pace of life is more leisurely not fast, then and you would not don't feel pressures of a rat race.  By contrast by, Singaporeans people shoulder are under more pressure. The Consumer Price Index (CPI) is so high,and there are no allowance of government subsidies 1. Even when you are older you also getting on in years, you still have to work because daily cost is so expensive of the high cost of living. However, according to my observation these two countries life quality of life in these two countries is higher than in China.  ,it is No question about it, China remains is still a developing country - , still some distance away from the developed countries a long way to catch up., which need all the Chinese people to effort fulfil it. This requires greater effort from all of us Chinese in China.

 I have to agree that life in Singapore is a giant rat race.  However, at the same time, can't blame them for it is a tiny island nation of 250 sq miles, about 28 miles by 14 miles.  It is totally devoid of natural resources.  It does not even has it own water supply and had to buy raw water from Johore, the southern state on the Malayan Peninsula.  Do you know that during World War II, the Japanese came from the north through the jungles of the Malayan Peninsula and Singapore surrendered after 3 days without firing a single shot?  It's because the Japanese cut off the water supply!  So if the people does not work at that frenzy place, they will never be in the top tier of the world's economies.  About 30 years ago, no one knows where Singapore is.  What was known then were the Singapore sling and some mentions as an exotic island far far away in some black and white movies!  Singapore had come a long way.

1.  Yes there are subsidies but not total.  The Singapore govt does not believe in free handouts because it understands human nature very well.  So what they did was to make sure the people pays half of everything.  This way the system is not abused.  For example in the US, we have to spend all our "insurance money" before the year ends because any left over that we did not use are NOT carried over to the next year.  So we spend that left over amount on things that we don't need!  That's the way of human nature.