Please help me correct this essay. I have been practising for the upcoming IELTS examination. "Some people think watching TV is bad for children, while others think watching TV has more beneficial effects on children. Discuss 2 sides. " *** Recently, media network, especially television, has been paid an attention because of its significant impacts on society. Although watching television has been affecting children in some detrimental ways, it has been playing a substantial role in the youth’s life. *** There are a variety of reasons why spending time on television is not advantageous. Firstly, television has influenced directly on children’s health, including vision and brain system, which leads to several health issues. For example, a child addicted to watching television is more likely to have serious problems relating to his brain development. Secondly, since media producers have focused on their benefits, almost created TV shows have no educational value, coupled with the existence of unhealthy videos, such as violent and sexual clips, bringing more negative influences to the youth. As a result, children waste their time and energy on their favorite shows, having no awareness of their bad effect. *** On the other hand, there are not without advantages for watching television. Since television has a myriad of choices for audiences, it is an ideal entertaining transport for the youth. This means that, instead of playing other dangerous outdoor sports, children could stay safely at home and watch a beneficial film. Also, if parents are conscious of the importance of watching educational shows, there will not without related document films and videos that are conducive for their children. Learning through watching is an effective and interesting way, contributing to visual ability and children’s cognitive. *** In conclusion, watching television has both particular impacts on children’s life. Even if its benefits have tended to outweigh its drawbacks, the influence of watching TV relies considerably on the TV user’s attitude.