The second day of records on italk，12.27.2016
I am busy recently，we had eat food with my friend at Chrismas Eve，our team play the laser gun in the second day，there are 16 people in our team，we are so tired，but we are happy。
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The second day of records on italk，12.27.2016
I am busy recently，(过去)I ate we had eat food with my friend on at Chrismas Eve，our team played(过去) the laser tag gun in on the second day，there were are 16 people in our team，we were are so tired，but we are were happy。1
My second day of notes (sentence practice) on italki, 12.27.2016
I am busy have been "goofing off" or "enjoying my time off" recently. we had eat I have spent time with my friends eating food with my friend at on Chrismas Eve. On Christmas day, my friends joined our team play the a laser gun competition the second day. There are were 16 people in on our team. we are were so tired, but we are were happy.NOTES:
1) Busy is not playing around with your friends.
2) Cannot use the word "we" unless you first introduce who "we" are. First introduce the noun, then use the pronoun.
3) "At" is not used on a specific day, instead use "on". You can use "at" for specific time on the clock.
4) Don't call a world famous day like Christmas "the second day"
5) I know it's strange but we don't normally say "in a team" to describe a competition but we will say "in a group". You could just say "We were a 16 person team."
6) Don't use Chinese punctuation (，。)when you type in English. The spacing is wrong. Change the settings in your 输入法 so that when you switch to English typing, it will switch to English punctuation.
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