Apartheid
Can someone give me some advice for my writing? I have a small vocaburary and can't write a polished style. Thank you (>人<)
I think Apartheid is the biggest issue for South Africa. It continued from 1948 to 1994. This took the voting right from blacks, gave them only works with very low pay and forced to live apart from whites.
It segregated public facilities such as restaurants, trains and buses into for whites and for blacks. Even hospitals were separated ones with facilities for whites and ones with insufficient facilities for blacks. Blacks who entered places such as parks for whites were arrested immediately and faced discrimination all the time for a long time.
I think everyone knows Apartheid. It’s been 22 years since that Apartheid was rescinded on the surface, allowing blacks to participate as equal citizens in their own country. However, now reverse Apartheid has been occurring, which means black government is discrimination against whites. The present government is made up of the overwhelming majority of blacks. How would it be if blacks who had been persecuted govern the country? They start carrying out policies which are in their favor. It seems like it’s quite difficult to get a job for whites compared to before. Even though Apartheid was rescinded, it’s not that the poor can get a job soon and there are still lots of people who live poorly. It seems like there is no tax for people live in a township, their water bill and hydro bill are paid by taxes from rich whites. Even if whites become poor, however, they cannot enter a township. Since the government implemented many policies which make whites difficult to live, many whites fled to another country. That said, they were born and raised in South Africa and it’s their home country. In this situation, it might remain to be seen how the country manages to build a society in which both blacks and whites can live without anxiety for the whole their lives.
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Apartheid
I think Apartheid remains the biggest issue facing South Africa. It officially was in effect from 1948 to 1994. It took away the voting rights of blacks, left them with only menial, low-paying job opportunities, and mandated that they live apart from whites. It also segregated public facilities such as restaurants, trains and buses into "those" for whites only and "thoses" for blacks. Even hospitals were not immune to such separation, with modern, "state of the art" facilities with highly trained doctors and staff for whites, in contrast to poor, insufficient facilities staffed by inadequately trained personnel for blacks. Furthermore, blacks who entered places reserved for whites such as parks or beaches, were immediately arrested. In short, as evidenced in Nelson Madela's autobiographies, blacks faced discrimination all the time, and for a very long time.I think everyone today knows about Apartheid. It’s been 22 years since that Apartheid ended, allowing blacks to participate as equal citizens in their own country. Now, however, with the black government's discrimination against the whites, "reverse" Apartheid has been occurring, The present government Is made up from, and represents, the overwhelming majority of blacks. How would it be if blacks who had been persecuted govern the country? They start carrying out policies which are in their favor. It seems like it’s quite difficult to get a job for whites when compared to before. Even though Apartheid was rescinded, it’s not that the poor can easily get a job, and there are still lots of people who live poorly. It also seems like there is no taxes for people who live in a township; their water bill and hydro (electricity?) bill are paid for by taxes from rich whites. And even if whites somehow become poor, they cannot legally live in a township. Since the government implemented many policies which make it difficult for whites to live there, with little or no prospects for the future, many whites have fled to other countries Still, they were born and raised in South Africa and it’s their home country. In this current situation, it remains to be seen exactly how the country can manage to build a fair and just society in which all of its citizens, both black and white, can co-exist peacefully and live, without anxiety, for the whole their lives.
Good job! I really do not know much about this situation, but just quickly reworded and rewrote some of your passages to make them clearer. I hope this helps you or, at least, gives you other ideas to write about. Best of luck! J.!
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