Speaker说学校应更重视开发学生的情感，而不是理性和逻辑。从开发情感、感觉的好处来讲，我们可能容易同意他的观点。但这说法忽视了过分关注情感的负面影响，和逻辑思考带给教育和社会的好处。

我同意这个说法，因为开发情感能使我们更人性化，并培养审美。文化和艺术课程能让我们更贴近感觉，缺点，命运--简而言之，跟贴近我们的人性，来提高我们的灵魂。换句话说，我们会变成一个更慈善更文明的社会。此外，艺术想法和灵感不是来源于逻辑而是真实情感，如。。。对艺术作品的真实测量方法不是技术的熟练程度而是对感情灵魂的影响。总之，对感情更多的关注能给人性和艺术带来进步。

相反，过分关注感情开发能给社会带来不好效果。感情给思想和行动带来不理智，这点今天热议的社会问题最能体现。如冰桶挑战，一个把冰水从头上倒下来的活动，来提高对一种稀有疾病的认识并筹集捐款。这个活动在今年早些时候从美国传来，在社交媒体上很流行。虽然他可能达到了一些功效，但考虑到健康风险、对水的浪费、人们能做的其他更真实的慈善活动、和更重要的事情，很多人批评他不理智且太感情化。相反，社会进步应靠因果关系，即靠辩证思维。

On the other hand, undue Too emphasis on anything is never good. the exploration of emotions can have undesirable effects on society. Exccessive emotions invite irrationality in thought and action.  This is as best illustrated by today’s heatedly debates on social problems. Consider, for example, Just take a look at the "Ice Bucket Challenge".  This is an activity involving involves the dumping a bucket of ice water on over one’s head to promote raise symbolically the awareness OF(?) of some rare and less known illness to  and encourage donations into research for a cure INTO(can OF,INTO coexist in this way?) a special disease. This campaign American fad has caught on fire become the rage on social media from America(?) earlier this year. While this might indeed have may achieved its goal,  to some degree, at the same time there are many who has criticized it who see it as irrational; not to mention about potential health risks to being subjected to extreme change in temperature to the body; the waste of water when there is this drought going on.[California is going through a 7 year drought where this fad comes from]  and emotional，.  given the health risks, misuse of water, other more genuine involvement in charitable activities and more important causes that should be taken up otherwise. On the contrary, social progress are best made by cause-and-effect relationships--that is, by critical thinking. There are things that are best handled through clear thinking and logic.

Written with clear and precise critical thinking. Good work.  However, I don't see major grammar errors. I'm showing you a way to express better.  I didn't really need to read your Chinese version in trying to understand what you wanted to convey.

Exploring Emotions? part1

The speaker asserts that schools should put more emphasis on exploring students’ emotions than on developing their capacity for reasoning and logical thinking. It might be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that tapping emotions and feelings(?) can benefit students and society. However, the claim overlooks the negative impact that excessive focus on emotions can have, and the benefits that logical thinking has have provided to education and society.

I agree with the claim insofar as developing our emotions helps enhance humanity and cultivate aesthetic appreciation. Cultural(?) and arts subjects serve to lift the human spirit by putting us more in touch with our own feelings, foibles, and fate,--in short, with our own humanity. With a heightened sensitivity to the human condition, we become more others-oriented, less self-centered, and more giving of ourselves. In other words, we become a more charitable and civilized society. Moreover, art appreciation and art students' artistic ideas and inspiration spring not from logic but from our real feelings such as love, joy, sympathy, compassion and sorrow. The true measure of artistic craft lies not in the technical proficiency but in the impact on emotions and spirit. In the main, more emphasis on the emotions and feelings help to bring about progress for humanity and the arts(?).

On the other hand, undue emphasis on the exploration of emotions can have undesirable effects on society. Emotions invite irrationality in thought and action，as best illustrated by today’s heatedly debated social problems. Consider, for example, the Ice Bucket Challenge, an activity involving dumping a bucket of ice water on one’s head to promote awareness of(?) and encourage donations to research into(can OF,INTO coexist in this way?) a special disease. This campaign has caught on fire on in the  American social media from America(?) earlier this year. While this might indeed have achieved its goal to some degree, at the same time there are many who has have criticized it as irrational and emotional，given the health risks, misuse of water, and other more genuine involvement in charitable activities and more important causes that should be taken up otherwise. On the contrary, social progress are is best made by cause-and-effect relationships - that is, by critical thinking.

explore emotions? part1

The speaker asserts that schools should put more emphasis on exploring the emotions of students’ emotions [My preference.  Emphasis on emotions rather than on students]than on developing their capacity for reasoning and logical thinking. It might may [preferably use present tense in an argumentive essay] be tempting to agree with the speaker on the basis that tapping ther emotional s and feelings(?) artistic capacity to can benefit students themselves and society. However, the his claim overlooked the negative impact that such excessive focus may exert on the contrary on emotions can have, and the benefits that logical thinking have provided to education and society.  [Very good so far, I can understand perfectly without referring to your Chinese version. Though grammar is correct, I am expressing it in a better way]

I can agree with the claim insofar as to developing our emotions artistic nature will helps enhance humanity and our way of life. cultivate aesthetic appreciation. Cultural(?) and arts subjects Such emphasis serve to do lift the our human spirit by putting us more and at the same time, to be in touch with our own feelings, foibles, and whatever challenges awaits for us in the future.  fate--in short, with our own humanityto have a productive and meaningful life. With a heightened sensitivity to the human condition be in tune with our surroundings, we become more people others-oriented, less self-centered, and more giving of ourselves. In other words, Thus, we become transcend to a more charitable and civilized society. Moreover, Through art appreciation, art student artistic ideas and inspiration spring not from automaton logic but from our real feelings such as of love, joy, sympathy, compassion and sorrow. The true measure of artistic craft artistry lies not in the technical proficiency or perfection but in the impact on how our inner emotions and spirit are conveyed to our fellowmen. In the main, more emphasis on the emotions and feelings help to bring about progress for humanity and art(?). [you are repeating unneedlessly]

In case of confusing expression,I have translated it roughly into my native language. wish this could help you understand what I mean.:)