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Do you want to be access in enter into the legal profession of in the People’s Republic of China?
In china, Those who want to be into the legal profession do should first get a law degree and pass the state judicial examination. If everything (note: not specific enough. What do you mean by everything) goes well, it only can spend take someone four years to practice law in China access into the legal profession. And Ppeople with a law degree in my country has have a broad range of jobs to be available to them. They can enter into the courts of justice, procuratorates, notarization institutions, law firms, ministries of law of enterprises, or even start their own law firms. (law firms should not be included in the list of job opportunities because jobs titles relate to actual people and law firms relate to places, buildings.)

China is a developing country and has develop fast in recent years,. We modified modifying our laws and regulations etc. Frequently in order to foster/promote the process of socialist modernization. So Therefore, the prospects for lawyers in my country are pretty well good;. especially, a
A career in commercial law is pretty good. But this choice will need someone to contribute more effort of himself. I think it is quite normal for a lawyer to work with detachment. A person who is good at a second language which will do a good job to him. <<< (This part needs to be moved to the front when you talk about "everything" a person should do to become a laywer.)

In conclusion, someone who want to be successful in legal profession of china should first get a law degree and take an exam, but who wants to be successful in a certain legal profession should study all the time and work hard. It is not easy to be a lawyer and it is a long way to go for our graduated students. (This part of your post sounds like you are simply retelling how you have become a laywer. But you really don't show us how hard it is. What do you mean by work hard? How many hours studying, attending conferences, passing exams. How tough is the competion? How fluent do you need to be in both Chinese and English? Are there advantages if you speak both languages well? These are the type of questions, you should answer for the reader who might be interested in practicing law in China.)

i suggest you rewrite this adding more details of the process, explain the benefits for a native English speaker who might be interested in this choice but also warn how tough it will be. But then conclude with something like how the hard work will be worth it because you will meet wonderful people, a culture rich with history that more foreigners have never experienced. 

thank you to help with my little notebook! good day for you!

Do you want to be access in legal profession of the People’s Republic of China?
In china, who want to be into the legal profession should first get a law degree and pass the state judicial examination. If everything goes well, it only can spend someone four years to access into the legal profession. And people with a law degree in my country has a broad range of jobs to be available to them. They can enter into the courts of justice, procuratorates, notarization institutions, law firms, ministries of law of enterprises.
China is a developing country and develop fast in recent years. We modified our laws and regulations etc. Frequently in order to foster/promote the process of socialist modernization. So the prospects for lawyer in my country are pretty well.
A career in commercial law is pretty good. But this choice will need someone to contribute more effort of himself. I think it is quite normal for a lawyer to work with detachment. A person who is good at a second language which will do a good job to him.
In conclusion, someone who want to be successful in legal profession of china should first get a law degree and take an exam, but who wants to be successful in a certain legal profession should study all the time and work hard. It is not easy to be a lawyer and it is a long way to go for our graduated students.

Do you want to enter into the legal profession in the People’s Republic of China? Those who do should first get a law degree and pass the state judicial examination. If everything goes well, it can take someone up to another four years to practice law in China. People with a law degree in my country have a broad range of jobs available to them. They can enter into the courts of justice, procuratorates, notarization institutions, ministries of law of enterprises, or even start their own law firm. China has develop fast in recent years, modifying our laws and regulations in order to foster and promote the process of socialist modernization. Therefore, the prospects for lawyers in my country are pretty good; especially, in commercial law.