Death Today, we talk about death. I hadn't thought over this issue until one night in last month. I was very frightened when it suddenly occurred to me that I would lose those people who I really

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Death Today, we talk about death. I hadn't thought over this issue until one night in last month. I was very frightened when it suddenly occurred to me that I would lose those people who I really valued one day. At that time, I felt sad. Yesterday, a famous actor passed away. He was always a minor part in a play. He looked so tired and so old in the pictures, quite different from the energetic image on TV. Life seems meteor. It fell out of sky, however, we didn't know where it was gone. I have a lingering idea: we are robots. We just work, eat, sleep, work… While, we are not as fortune as them. They could live if there are energy batteries, and it's impossible for us. So, please treasure the people around you. Then, even death steps, we are not afraid.

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Death

Today, we talk about death.

I hadn't really thought about death until one night in last month. I was very frightened when it suddenly occurred to me that I would lose those people who I really valued one day. At that time, I felt sad.

Yesterday, a famous actor passed away. He ~~was~~ always played a minor part in a play. He looked so tired and so old in the pictures, quite different from the energetic image I'd seen of him on TV. Life seems like a meteor. It falls out of the sky, however, we didn't know where it goes..

I have an ~~lingering~~ idea: We are robots. We just work, eat, sleep, work…however, we are not as fortunate as real robots because they could live forever if there were enough batteries, and it's impossible for us to live forever.

So, please treasure the people around you. Then, even death, we do not have to fear.

My Mom died about 2 years ago. I know how you feel.
Live now. Love now. Yes.

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An alternative version:

Death

Today, we talk about death.

I hadn't thought about this issue until one night in last month. I was very frightened when it suddenly occurred to me that one day I would lose those people who I really valued. At that time, I felt sad.

Yesterday, a famous actor passed away. He ~~was~~ always played a minor part in a plays. He looked so tired and so old in the pictures, quite different from his energetic image on TV. Life seems like a meteor. It fell out of sky, however, and we dodn't know where it went.

I have a lingering idea: we are robots. We just work, eat, sleep, work… Of course, we are not as fortunate as them. They could live if there is energy in their batteries, and it's impossible for us.

So, please treasure the people around you. Then, we will not even be afraid of death's footsteps.

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