Indeed, by inviting foreign factories investment to set up factories in developing countries can create more greater job opportunites for than from locals.__By contrast, in the case of the US, the relatively weakness in its manufacturing strength poor manufactural strenght of the US should be is partly responsible to blame for the high unemployment crisis in the country America.__What is more, Also, the entrance entry of the a foreign business can also fooster the cultural diversification, which is extremely important for improvement of in any democracy.

Local companies, however, if they are not mature developed or strong enough to compete,_failure in the local market will happen won't be impossible.__Besides, bilateral relatsionship is always about doing trade and having culture exchange.__Economic friction between the local companies business and their foreign counterparts will always arise also fire the tensions between two sides. Thus, it is quite difficult the goverment to strike a balance in this process,_considering any curtailing rejection of the foreign companies business may harm the activinessof its inner basic  economy.

To sum In summing up, globalization is a trend of that the world which finds it is hard to resist alter.__In this process, The goverment should give more guidance incentives to their own local companies while attracting introducing the high-end foreign technology from freign conpanies to develope.

Now you have three different versions and styles to ponder about.  One more note.  There is difference in the meanings of "entrance" and "entry".  The former is the place to go in while the latter is the act of going in.

The entry is to your left.   This means the way to enter is on your left.

The entrance is to your left. The door (the place to enter) is on your left.  This makes me think of the Chinese word for would be 米 (raw rice) and 飯 (cooked rice).  You don't say 吃米 for a person. 吃米虫 and 吃飯虫 are different.

Globalisation is a double-edge sword

Some people think inviting foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries is helpful for improving local economy, while others believe that foreign companies should not be allowed to do so and the development of  local companies should be encouraged instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


nowdays, the globalisation is mainly driven by the force the  of (?)expansion of the international business.TheForeign investment from developed countries somehow  undoubtedly do contributes to the rise of the developing economies, which can be
fully illustrated in the case of china. Though, if the local companies isn't get  aren't prepared for this , things will be slightly different. there can often be negative consequences for these companies
Indeed, inviting foreign factories to set up factories in developing countries can create more job opportunites for locals.By contrast, in the case of US, relatively poor manufactural strenght strength of the US should be partly responsible for the unemployment crisis in America.what is more, Furthermore, the entrance of the foreign business can also fooster foster the cultural divirsification, which is extremely important for improvement of a demoracy.
local companies, however, if they are not mature enough to compete,failure in the local market won't be impossible  .  is highly likely. Besides, bilatral bilateral relationship is alway about doing trade and having culture exchange.economic friction between local companies and their foreign counterparts also fire the tensions between two sides. Thus, it is quite difficult  for the
government to strike a balance in this process,considering that rejection of the foreign companies may harm the activiness  robust energy of its inner economy.
To sum up, globalization is the trend of the world which is hard to alter.In this embracing the globilization process, the goverment  should, at the same time, give more guidance to their own companies while introduce introducing the high-end technology from foreign conpanies to develop.

 I am not very knowledgeable about economics, but i just tried to write how I would write it. Of course, others would certainly express this other ways. What I am saying is, don't think my corrections are perfect! 

 What is impressive is your use of transitions like, ...thus,...to sum up...though...indeed. etc...

Keep writing!

Globalisation is a Double-edged Sword

Some people think inviting foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries is helpful for improving the local economy, while others believe that foreign companies should not be allowed to do so and local companies should be encouraged instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


Nowdays, the globalisation is mainly driven by the force of the expansion of the international business. The foreign investment from developed countries somehow does contribute to the rise of the developing economies, which can be
fully illustrated in the case of China. Though, if the local companies aren't prepared for this, things will be slightly different.
Indeed, inviting foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries can create more job opportunities for locals. By contrast, in the case of US, the relatively poor manufacturing strength of the US is partly responsible for the unemployment crisis in America. What is more, the entrance of the foreign businesses can also foster the cultural diversification, which is extremely important for improvement of a democracy.
Local companies, however, if they are not mature enough to compete, risk failure in the local market won't be impossible. Besides, bilateral relasionship is always about doing trade and having cultural exchange. Economic friction between local companies and their foreign counterparts also ignites the tensions between two sides. Thus, it is quite difficult for the goverment to strike a balance in this process, considering rejection of the foreign companies may harm the growth of its inner economy.
To sum up, globalization is trend of the world which is hard to alter. In this process, the goverment should give more guidance to their own companies while introduce the high-end technology from foreign companies to develop.

Overall, you've done an excellent job, especially considering that you've challenged yourself with complex sentence structure. The rules of punctuation spacing and capitalization are not suggestions. The spelling and incorrect tense errors are distracting, and I've made some replacements of some words and terms to what we would actually say. Globalisation is spelled with an s in the US, but a z in the UK.

By your request.

Globalisation is a Double-edged Sword Capitalize all significant words in a title.

Some people [多餘] think that inviting foreign companies to set up factories in developing countries is helpful for improving the local economy. [字句太長了, 一口都說不完] while Others believe that foreign companies should not be allowed to do so come in.  and Instead, local companies should be encouraged instead. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.


Nowdays, the globalisation is mainly driven by the force the of expansion of the from international bussiness.__The Foreign investment from developed countries somehow do contributes to the rise of the local developing economies. , which can be
fully illustrated in Take the case of China as an example. Though, If the local companies isn't get are not prepared for this , things will turned out to be slightly different.