Speaking exam speech 3

This speech is my worst one, I couldn't really think of things to say, so any help would be much appreciated! It is about my plans for Summer Vacation. 谢谢。

暑假在夏天假期期间，我打算去很多地方玩儿。八月二十号我和我的好朋友将去中国。首先我要坐公共汽车去伦敦飞机场。然后当后我们坐飞机去南京。我们想在南京我们想找租房(or "我们想在南京找房子租")，然后以后我们看看南京的城里。我门要一所漂亮，很大，也很便宜的房子房租。我和我的好朋友都是汉语学生，所以我们想去中国，一方面是因为我们希望提高我们的汉语水平，一方面是我们想看去看看很多中国有名的地方。因为从七月开始上汉语课，所以在八月我们想要去南京很多地方玩完儿（I just dont know exactly what you want to say, do you think the two have the cause and effect relation? I just think there is no need to use "因为" and "所以".）。去年我打算去很多地方，比如：上海，北京还有东京。我不常吃中国餐，一方面因为我是学生，所以没有钱买中国菜的配料，另一方面中国餐馆儿都越来越贵了。但是去年在中国我能吃到了很多中国餐。在这个时候，我会很高兴。

“暑假” maybe more concised instead of "在夏天假期". We seldom or never say in that way.

“去很多地方玩” rather than "去很多玩"，"很多" can not modify "玩"。

 “一方面……，另一方面……”

“能” means ability or permission. Here you say "last year", so it is the thing have happened already. We usually put "到了" just at the end of the verbs so they will means have done. such as "听到了" and "看到了" just means have heard and have seen. 

Your Chinese is pretty good now and I think you will have no problem to communicate with people in China. Hope you will have a good trip in China!

Welcome to China!

Speaking exam speech 3

This speech is my worst one, I couldn't really think of things to say, so any help would be much appreciated! It is about my plans for Summer Vacation. 谢谢。

在夏天假期期间，我打算去很多地方玩儿。八月二十号我和我的好朋友去中国。首先我要坐公共汽车去伦敦飞机场。然后我们坐飞机去南京。在南京我们想找租房，然后我们看看南京的城里。我门要一所漂亮，很大，也很便宜的房子。我和我的好朋友都是汉语学生，所以我们想去中国，一方面是因为我们希望提高我们的汉语水平，一方面是我们想去看很多中国有名的地方。因为汉语课七月就要开始了，所以在七月之前我们想要去南京多玩几个地方。去年我打算去很多地方，比如：上海，北京还有东京。我不常吃中国餐，一方面因为我是学生，所以没有钱买中国菜的配料，一方面中国餐馆儿都越来越贵了。但是去年在中国我能吃很多中国餐。在这个时候，我会很高兴。