First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hi, I'm Korean, and I'm 23 years old (in Korean age). And I'm a junior at my university.

1st year - freshman

2nd year - sophmore

3rd year - junior 

4th year - senior

My name is Sun Hee Ahn, but you call me Sun hee, or Sunny.

I'm enjoying my major, which is law.

My hobbies are reading the books and listening to music.

I like K-Pop and Japanese music too.

My favorite singers are H.O.T., BEAST, KINKIN KIDS (All Korean singers) and Smap, a singer from Japan.  I also like West life, BSB, Britney Spears, etc...

I like the TV show 'Friends', it's a really funny sitcom.

I live in Seoul, the capital of the Republic of Korea.

My English isn't (that) good, but I'll try to improve.

And I want go to Europe, and I want to be able to speak English well.

Do you understand what I wrote? My English is not good.. I hope you understand what I wrote.

Thank you. I hope we become good friends.  

I hope we'll be good friends.

만약우리는서로의글들을계속수정한다면, 우리의우정이유지될거에요.     당신의능력들을향상할수있다면, 전계속수정할거에요.  글은 계속 쓰기가 짧게 해주십시오. (짧은 << ) 전 새 글을 출판했어요. 보세요! 감사합니다.

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그건대문자로써야합니다. 

바꿔쓸수있는표현, 또는나의추천입니다. 

이건더자연스럽거나더일반적인방법의표현입니다.

오타, 또는수정이필요한부분그리고단어의순서, 단어의선택이나철자를고쳤습니다. 

밑줄을있을때, 맞은구두점과띄어쓰기를사용해주세요.       

보라색  제코멘트입니다.               

------ (이것이도움이됐으면좋겠습니다)

First notebook entry: Introducing Myself.

Hi, I'm Korean.I'm 23 years old (in Korean years). I'm a university student of 3rd grade.

My name is Sun Hee Ahn, but you call me Sun hee, or Sunny. 

My major is Law, and I like it.

My hobbies are reading books and listening to music.

I like Korean songs, pop-songs and Japanese songs.

My favorite singers are H.O.T.(Korean singer), BEAST (Korean singer), KINKIN KIDS and Smap(Japaness Singer), West Life, BSB, Britney Spears, etc...

I like 'Friends' series !! It is a little old, but so funny!!! ^^

I live in Seoul, Republic of Korea.

My English is not good, but I'm trying to improve it. 

I wanna go to Europe, and I want to be a good communicator in English.

Did you understand my post?? My English is not good.. So you have a good grasp of my English now... ^^;;;

Thank you, we will be good friends !! :)  ...NIce to meet you, Sunny. Good work with English here...Keep practicing!! :D

**Regards!! :D

Hi Sunny!  I also noticed this (in green):

"Hi, I'm Korean.I'm 23 years old (in Korean years). I'm an university student of 3rd grade. 

My name is Sun Hee Ahn, but you can call me Sun hee, or Sunny. 

...

My favorite singers are H.O.T.(Korean singer), BEAST (Korean singer), KINKIN KIDS and Smap(Japanese Singer), West Life, BSB, Britney Spears, etc... "