Not the richer is the happier
Sometimes I think about poor people and I felt sad.
Looking that they don't have access to health insurance, electricity or good water.
The worst thing is that while they smile and enjoy as much as possible I get sad and I envy them because I worried more about the future, the job I don't have, the girlfriend I don't find.
Do they are only ignorant or they are clever than me?
For that reason I'm feeling dumb and I want to change my mind focusing in how lucky I am.
You can correct to me and participate too.
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The richer aren't happier (Not the richer sounds kind of strange in english)
Sometimes I think about poor people and I feel sad.
I see that they don't have access to health insurance, electricity, or good water.
(Looking is not bad, but in formal english it's important for sentences to always have a subject connected to a verb. However, you can start a sentence with "Looking" if you add another clause/part to your sentence that connects a subject to it- "Looking, that they don't have access to health insurance, electricity, or good water, I feel upset." Here the blue is connected to the ending clause due to the first and last commas)
The worst thing is that while they smile and enjoy as much as possible, I get sad and I envy them because I am more worried about the future, the job I don't have, and the girlfriend I don't find.
Are they only ignorant or are they more clever than me?
For that reason, I'm feeling dumb and I want to change my mind focusing on how lucky I am.
You can correct to me and participate too.
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Not the richer is the happier
Sometimes I think about poor people and I felt feel sad.
The worst thing is that while they smile and enjoy as much as possible, I get sad and I envy them because I am worried more about the future, the job I don't have, the girlfriend I don't find. (A really good sentence! But, it is very long - it would be best to break it into two sentences at "because")
For that reason, I'm feeling dumb. and I want to change my mind, and focus on focusing in how lucky I am.
You can correct to me and participate too.
(An awesome entry! I corrected some of the grammar errors that I know are wrong, but many of the corrections could go in a different direction depending on the tone of what you want to say. I corrected it to how I would present the sentences - but it's definitely not the only answer!)
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Not the richer is the happier
Sometimes I think about poor people and I feel sad.
Seeing that they don't have access to health insurance, electricity or good water.
The worst thing is that while they smile and enjoy themselves as much as possible, I get sad and I envy them because I worry more about the future, the job I don't have, the girlfriend I haven't found.
Are they just ignorant or are they more clever than me?
For that reason I feel dumb and I want to change my mentality, focusing on how lucky I am.
You can correct me and participate too.
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