First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello, everybody. My name is Jiaqi, but you can also call me by my English name, Lala. I work for an English education organization. My job is to find and help more people who want to improve their English skills. Everyone has a dream, and my dream at present is to have the opportunity to study English for free in our company. In order to achieve this small dream I work very hard everyday to make my sales. I expect to get a bigger space for development, and I know that the way to achieve my dream could be very hard, but I'm not afraid to face every difficulty. To gain the same as others, I have to pay two or three timeas more than the others. Having good English skills could make it easier. I would like to study English with people from all over the world who have the same dream!

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello everybody, my name is Jiaqi, but you can also call me my English name, Lala.(remember to put spaces after periods and commas!) I work for an English education organization company. My job is to find and help more people who want to improve their English skills. Everyone has a dream, and my dream of present is to get a chance to study English for free in our company. In order to achieve the my dream I do work very hard everyday to generate sales. I expect to get a more bigger space for development, and attaining/achieving my dream could be very hard. However, I'm not afraid to face these difficulties.To gain the same as (what do you mean by gain here?) theothers, I have to pay double or even triple as much as they do. Owning a good English skill could make it more easily (Being more proficient in English would make this much easier.) I would like to study English with people from all over the world who have the same dream!

Very good, keep it up!

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello everybody,my name is Jiaqi,and you can also call me my English name Lala.I work for an English education organization company.My work of everyday is to find and help more people who want to improve their English skills.Everyone has a dream,and my dream of present is to get a chance to study English for free in our company.In order to achieve the small dream I do work very hard everyday to create my sales.I expect to get a more bigger space of development,and I know the way to achieve my dream could be very hard,but I'm not afraid to face every difficulty.To gain the same than others,I have to pay double or even triple as much than the others.Own a good English skill could make it more easily,I would like to study English with people from all over the world who has the same dream!