how to deal with lonely
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Feeling lonely isn't rare in our daily life. Though it is considered disconfortable, learning how to cope with this feeling is the essential class in our life. I used to be obsess by the situation when my fmaily were all outside and leaving me alone in home. My father works in China and my mom who is a nurse often comes back home from hospice at midnight. The only one person who accompanied me was my older sister. Whereas, instead of staying at home, she lives in dorm for studying college. I am good at cooking, so I can cook several dishes including western and Chinese cuisine; however, even if I cook the most dilicious food in the world, there was no one can enjoy them with me. Staring the table fulled with various dishes, at that moment, it seemed like the scene gave me an alarm finding out that I hadn't dare to face the lonely feeling in my heart. That night, I told to myself, " Mom and Dad have their difficulty, but what I can do is taking good care of myself, not lettinf them worried."
I tried to devert my mind from descending in negative mood by doing something, such as studying, reading novels and playing the violin. Playing the violin always can smooth my emotion. While immersiving myself in music, I feel peaceful and all the fear of being lonely disappears as soon as I see colorful notes flying in the room. The snack, a character in the bestseller, "Little Princess" says " Even if in crowd, you will feel lonly." I think the feeling that I concern I will be abanded, be forgotten isn't because we are physically alone, but it is due to the void of my inner space.To fix the empity inner space, I write diary aspecially whem my mood is dowm to the bottom. Writing helps me organize my thought while using positive sentences can chree me up. With these methods elaborated above, now I can deal with my lonely feeling better than I used to do ane I realized that there are some certain problems that can be over come only by ourselves.
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How to Deal with Loneliness (Could someone please help me with my writing?)
Loneliness is not a rare occurrence in our daily life. Though it is not something often talked about, learning how to cope effectively with this feeling is an essential skill in our life. I used to be apprehensive whenever my family members were all outside, and I remained home alone by myself. My father works in China, and my mom, who is a nurse, often comes back home from the hospice at midnight. The only one person who often provides me with some company is my older sister, but instead of living at home, she lives in a college dorm to assist with her studies. Fortunately, I am a good cook, and I can prepare several dishes, which include both Western and Chinese cuisine; however, even if I cook the most delicious food in the world, as represented by the various dishes there on the table, there is often no one here to share and enjoy it with me.
In that respect, it is as if life is somehow mocking me for refusing to face the loneliness within my heart. I frequently tell myself, "Mom and Dad have their own problems and difficulties, but what I can do is not cause them more worries by taking good care of myself.” As a result, I try to divert my mind from spiraling downward into a negative mood by doing other things, such as studying, reading novels, or playing the violin, thus, keeping it preoccupied. Playing the violin always seem to soothe my emotions, since I feel peaceful whenever I lose myself in the activity, and that ever-present fear of feeling lonely magically disappears once I hear those colorful notes dancing around the room.
Yet, something that I can identify with is when Snack, a character in the bestseller, Little Princess, aptly states, “Even if in a crowd, you will feel lonely.” I think the feeling that I am mostly concerned about whenever I am physically alone, is not one of abandonment or being lonely, but instead results from a sense of emptiness within my inner core. To fill that emptiness, I often write about many things within my diary, especially when my mood starts to darken. Such writing helps me to focus and to organize my thoughts while creating positive affirmations that also serve to cheer me up. Through these methods, I have been able to deal with my feelings of loneliness much better than I used to do, and now, I have come to realize that there are certain problems that only we, ourselves, can truly overcome.*/**
Hi, 宛婷. Good job! Whatever changes I made were to allow your sentences to sound more natural to my native ears, to clarify your thoughts, and for ease of reading. Sincerest apologies if I have misinterpreted. I hope that this helps you. J.
*This was a well-written post, and other than seconding Andy's comments, I would also suggest writing more concisely (i.e., condense your thoughts into fewer words) as you often became too “wordy” at times. It is neither here nor there, but I am not familiar with (A) Little Princess nor its characters, yet, a quick search on the internet to check your quote yielded no such character, thus, I left it as is.
**I think that occasionally feeling lonely is simply part of the human condition. How we deal with it though is a personal matter, so I am glad that you have found various ways that work for you, and particularly, that those ways are productive and positive ones. I myself usually go for a run or lift weights whenever I am feeling down—not only for the mental distraction, but also for the resulting endorphin kick. As you no doubt know by now, staying busy at some task certainly helps. Perhaps, as with your diary entries, my occasional edits here also serve a similar purpose… Regardless, best of luck!
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* Nicely written; a few spelling issues. I recommend running and English spell checker and you'll be able to fix those pretty fast. I would say there are more than one essential task in our lives, so I say 'an' instead of 'the', which denotes there are multiple essential tasks. 'the' denotes a single task. 'Quite low' is more frequently used when describing mood and I recommend that terminology here, as opposed to 'down to the bottom', which makes sense but to me sounds a little unnatural (as a native English speaker, US)
how to deal with lonely
Could someone help me with my writing?
Feeling lonely isn't rare in our daily life. Though it is considered disconfortable uncomfortable, learning how to cope with this feeling is the an essential class task in our life. I used to be obsessed by the situation when my fmaily family were all outside and leaving me alone in home. My father works in China and my mom who is a nurse often comes back home from hospice at midnight. The only one person who accompanied me was my older sister. Whereas, instead of staying at home, she lives in dorm for studying college. I am good at cooking, so I can cook several dishes including western and Chinese cuisine; however, even if I cook the most dilicious delicious food in the world, there was no one can enjoy them with me. Staring the table fulled with various dishes, at that moment, it seemed like the scene gave me an alarm finding out that I hadn't dare to face the lonely feeling in my heart. That night, I told to myself, " Mom and Dad have their difficulty difficulties, but what I can do is taking good care of myself, not lettinf letting them worried worry."
I tried to devert divert my mind from descending in negative mood by doing something, such as studying, reading novels and playing the violin. Playing the violin always can smooth my emotion. While immersiving immersing myself in music, I feel peaceful and all the fear of being lonely disappears as soon as I see colorful notes flying in the room. The snack, a character in the bestseller, "Little Princess" says " Even if in crowd, you will feel lonly lonely." I think the feeling that I concern I will be abanded abandoned, be forgotten isn't because we are physically alone, but it is due to the void of my inner space.To fix the empity empty inner space, I write diary aspecially especially whem when my mood is dowm down to the bottom quite low. Writing helps me organize my thought while using positive sentences can chree cheer me up. With these methods elaborated above, now I can deal with my lonely feeling better than I used to do ane and I realized that there are some certain problems that can be over come only by ourselves.
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