Science and Art in our society.
on the next paragraphs, I discuss other's people opinions (This is a practice for IELTS exam)
So, please let me know if you understand the ideas I expressed and if you have any suggestion, please share it wih me.
Thank you in advance :D
1. They maintain that modern-economies cannot advance without a strong scientific base. A case in point is Mexico which have a lack of scientific researches. Consequently this has an important impact on the economy of my country and it is still an undevelop country.
2. It is argued by some people that Science has an effect on everything we do from eating to travelling. For instance, in the case of food, people can consume all types of products during all seasons of the year and this was initiated by the discoveries of Biology. Futhermore, the invention of the plane was possible with the principles of Physics. Thus, with this remarkable creation, we can travel faster and safer.
3. Some people feel that certain works of art that are produced are offensive and should be banned. Take as an example the citizens of my country who condemned the decision of allowing to mexicans artists to draw on some walls of the subway station because they considered urban art as inappropiate for the image of the city.
4. Many people think that scientists should have some involvement with artists and vici versa. Bringing these groups together would be better for society as a whole. A good example of this is when complex information from Science can be explained easier with a painting, music or statue. Thus, the understanding of ppeople of difficult scientific concepts would be improved.
5. A commonly held belief is that spending time alone in laboratories without much human contact is not very interesting. Take as an example the vast amount of movies which has spread this image. As a result, science is considered as boring career for a considerebly amount of people.
6. Some people feel that many scientific experiments are dangerous to society. There are many examples where serious mistakes have been made. A case in point is the troubling experiements with nuclear energy carried out in Chernobil which had not only negative effects on the environment but also on the health of thousand of people. As a result, the current society is more involved in avoiding that these kind of catastrophes take place again.
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Science and Art in our society.
on the next paragraphs, I discuss other's people opinions (This is a practice for IELTS exam)
So, please let me know if you understand the ideas I expressed and if you have any suggestion, please share it wih me.
Thank you in advance :D
1. They maintain that modern-economies cannot advance without a strong scientific base. A case in point is Mexico which have has a lack of scientific researchers. Consequently this has an important impact on the economy of my country and it is still an undeveloped country.
2. It is argued by some people that Science has an effect on everything we do from eating to travelling. For instance, in the case of food, people can consume all types of products during all seasons of the year and this was initiated made possible by the discoveries discovery of Biology. Furthermore, the invention of the plane was possible with the principles of Physics. Thus, with this remarkable creation, we can travel faster and safer.
3. Some people feel that certain works of art that are produced are offensive and should be banned. Take as an example the citizens of my country who condemned the decision of allowing to to allow Mexicans artists to draw on some walls of the subway station because they considered urban art as inappropriate for the image of the city.
4. Many people think that scientists should have some involvement with artists and vici vice versa. Bringing these groups together would be better for society as a whole. A good example of this is when complex information from Science can be explained easier with a painting, music or statue. Thus, the understanding of ppeople people's understanding of difficult scientific concepts would be improved.
5. A commonly held belief is that spending time alone in laboratories without much human contact is not very interesting. Take as an example the vast amount of movies which has spread this image. As a result, science is considered as a boring career for a considerebly considerable amount of people.
6. Some people feel that many scientific experiments are dangerous to society. There are many examples where serious mistakes have been made. A case in point is the troubling experiments with nuclear energy carried out in Chernobyl which had not only negative effects on the environment but also on the health of thousand of people. As a result, the current society is more involved in avoiding assuring that these kinds of catastrophes do not take place again.
Hello, I hope you find these corrections helpful. Overall, the ideas you are expressing are clear with a few small grammatical or spelling errors. There are a few fairly simple ways - mostly word choice and sentence structure - to express these ideas more succinctly but with greater depth. Good luck on your exam!
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Hi, writing is good but I felt your expression of idea little vague. I'm also preparing for ielts if you are interested for co-study, Then Ping me back
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