The lady at the metro line station(Ⅰ)
It's super crowded on Shanghai metro lines, especially at junction stations in rush hours. As a safety solution, the metro line company arranges coordinators to remind passengers to watch out and not to look at their cellphones.
Every morning when I get off the train there is a lady standing at the bottom of the escalator upstairs to exits. She looks around 55 years old but unlike women of her age she is very thin and her back is very straight. As I could recall, she is always in black trousers, black leather flats and on top a orange waistcoat as staff uniform. She doesn't make up. The curved reddish brown hair is all the fashion she has.
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The Woman at the Metro line Station - Part Ⅰ
On Shanghai metro lines, it can often become incredibly crowded, but especially at junction stations during the rush hours. As a safety precaution, the metro line company has employees, known as coordinators, who constantly remind passengers to be aware of their surroundings, and most importantly, not to allow themselves to be distracted by looking at their cell phones. Every morning when I myself get off the train, one of them, a woman, is standing there, at the foot of the escalators leading upstairs to the exits.
She looks to be around 55 years old, but unlike other women her age, she is very thin and her back is very straight. As I recall, she always wears black trousers, black leather flats, and over her blouse, an orange waistcoat, which identifies her as a safety staff member. She does not use makeup, and the curve in her reddish brown hair is about all the fashion she possesses.
Hi, Kailin. An incredibly auspicious beginning, the continuation of which I look forward to with anticipation…
Perhaps a connection will come later, and I am not certain that one even exists, but I created one now. Otherwise, your introduction is somewhat pointless, and the setting of it will be too far removed (as far as the reader is concerned...) from whatever you will talk about later on.
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The lady at the metro line station(Ⅰ)
It's super crowded on Shanghai metro lines, especially at junction stations in rush hours. As a safety solution, the metro line company arranges coordinators to remind passengers to watch out and not to look at their cellphones.
Every morning when I get off the train there is a lady standing at the bottom of the escalator which goes upstairs to exits. She looks around 55 years old but unlike women of her age she is very thin and her back is very straight. As I could *recall, she is always in black trousers, black leather flats2* and on top an orange waistcoat as staff uniform. She doesn't wear make up. The/Her curved reddish brown hair is all the fashion she has.
To be continued.
*a typical expression is - as far as I recall
2* I'm not sure what flats are , but I'm not a fashion expert. Flat shoes?
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