First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning English at the moment because it is an international and important language.And I think it is really cool if I can speak frulent English.
My native language is Chinese,and I grew up in Shanghai,China.
I enjoy reading alone and listening to the music.I love the blue sky and stars at night.I love enjoying every beautiful thing in life.

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First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I am learning English at the moment because it is an international and important language.I think it would be really cool if I could speak fluent English someday.
My native language is Chinese,and I grew up in Shanghai,China.

I enjoy reading alone and listening tomusic.I love the blue sky and the stars at night.I love enjoying every beautiful thing in life.

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Explainations:

First correction: a space should follow all commas, periods, question marks, exclamination marks, colons, and semi-colons (.,?!:;).

Second, third, and fourth corrections: The tenses were a bit weird, I just fixed it by matching all the tenses.

Fifth and sixth corrections: same as the first correct

Seventh correction: you can leave out "the" in certain cases, and it kind of works here, but I as I talked, I would use the word "the". Example: Rabbit is purple. Rabbits are white. The rabbits are white. The rabbit is purple.

Eighth correction: same as the first, fifth, and sixth corrections.

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Cycling through the rain into the sunshine

Several days ago, I bought a new bicycle because I was tired of waiting for bus. Unfortunately, it's a rainy summer in Beijing. Last Wednesday it rained when I was riding my bicycle to work. "it won't be a pleasant journey" I thought until i notised that it's sunny in the west. I was so glad. it just liked i was cycling Cycling through the rain into the sunshine.

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Cycling through the rain into the sunshine

Several days ago, I bought a new bicycle because I was tired of waiting for the bus. Unfortunately, it's a rainy summer in Beijing. Last Wednesday, it rained when I was riding my bicycle to work. "It won't be a pleasant journey," I thought until I noticed that it was sunny in the west. I was so glad. It felt like I was cycling, cycling through the rain and into the sunshine.

Thoughts: bus is an object, so we typically place 'The' or 'A' in front of it, depending on the context. In this case, "The bus," a specific bus you wait for. "A bus," would refer to any bus at all.

Commas are typically used whenever you feel a slight pause about what you read. For instance: "Hello, my name is Michael, how are you?" verse "Hello. My name is Michael. How are you?" Periods use slightly more drawn out pauses.

If you've noticed, whenever you quote, the first word should be capitalized. That will never change. How you end the quote will, though. If you continue with the sentence, a short pause is required for fluid reading. "What a wonderful day," he thought to himself. If you wish to end the dialogue, or end on a quote, proper puncuation is required. He knew what he had to say, "Stop! Don't go, I love you!"

You mispelled noticed, but that's not a big deal. Also, the work "I" alone is capitalized.

The next mistake is one that is a tad more advanced. Tenses. Past tense such as: was, saw, walked. vs Future tense: see, am, will.

I walked to the store

I will walk to the store

I am on my way

I was on my way

I saw you

I will see you

The past part was complicated, I'm not quite sure how to describe it and what I corrected may not even be what you intended.

Sorry this is so long, hope I helped!