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Topic : Some people think that young people should follow in their parent's footsteps when choosing a profession.

To begin with, one of the most difficult problems of a young person is to  decide what to do about the career. There are many interesting and useful professions, and it is really not an easy task to choose the right one. Besides, young people prefer to search well-paid and easy work. Parents can give advice, but teenagers can give up from their help, because they like other job.
On the one hand, every person want to earn a lot of money in order to have opportunity to relax for abroad and buy expensive cars and houses.And Also, young people want to have a lot of money and to be independent from their parents . Young people may not like the profession of parents, for example, a doctor or teacher. Maybe, young person want to be a fireman.
On the other hand, young people should follow advice of parents about choosing a occupation, because parents are ill-advised to not. More than that, if every members of family have the same profession it is very interesting and useful. Young people are helped by the parents .
To sum up of all, as per me, I want to be a translator or teacher of English language. I know that my parents and friends, who are always ready to listen me and help in making of my decision.

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