First notebook entry: Introducing myself

Hello everybody.

I am Chinese. You may call me Zhou; it's my last name. My friends usually call me this. I plan to go to Canada to have a new life with my husband, so I want to speak English well. Furthermore, I am here is that I want to make more friends, without regard to national boundaries.

Hopefully we can be friends! Thank you.

Best regards!

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Comments:

1. Commas (",") can only be used to combine phrases (groups of words that are not sentences or larger than sentences), and not full sentences. If you want to combine two sentences together into one sentence, then you need to use a semicolon (";") or a comma combined with a conjunction (such as "and,"). Overall, you should use less commas and more periods.

2. It's a small rule that even native English speakers get wrong most of the time, but when you are allowing somebody to do something (such as allowing them to call you a certain name), you use "may", and when you are stating that it is possible for them to do something, you use "can". Because you are saying that we are allowed to call you "Zhou" (as it is obviously possible), you use "may".

3. In English, all punctuation marks such as periods or commas must have spaces after them.

4. Because there is only one English language, you just say "English", and not "a English" or "the English".

5. "Naming" is something that only happens once per name. If your friends call you by the same name multiple times, then they are calling you that name, not naming you that name.

6. You should always put a blank line after a paragraph.

7. When you are adding on to a point, it is better to use "furthermore" or "also" instead of "even more".

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First notebook entry: Introducing Myself

Hello. My name is Eri. I'm 29 years old. I live in Okinawa, Japan.
I am interested in American culture. I study English. I want to make Friends.

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The reasonings behind my corrections are listed below.

1. Because "Introducing Myself" is the title of this notebook entry, it follows different capitalization rules. In English, all nouns, verbs, adverbs, and other important words in a title are generally capitalized. Most prepositions (such as "of", "from", or "to"), articles (such as "the", "a", and "an"), and other short words are not capitalized.

2. You must always put a space after the period of an English sentence.

3. Sentences in English must always have subjects, such as "I", "you", "me", or "the book", and verbs, such as "am", "is", or "are".

4. In English, towns/cities/provinces (such as Okinawa) and their associated countries (such as Japan) are always separated by a comma, as in "Okinawa, Japan", "London, England", and "Paris, France".