Today, there's no star in the sky

<em>Today, there were no starts in the sky. (You have written this like a story, so I have put everything in the past tense. It sounds much more natural this way)</em>

Today, I went downstairs to jog as usual. It's a clear night with gentle breeze. But unfortunately, there's no stars in the sky. How long haven't I seen stars in the sky in Shanghai?

<em>Today, I went downstairs to jog as usual. It was a clear night with a gentle breeze. But unfortunately, there were no stars in the sky. How has it been since I saw stars in the sky in Shanghai? (more natural) OR For how long have I not seen stars in Shanghai (formally correct and closer to yours, but sounds awkward)</em>

I remember that when I was a primary school student, I liked counting stars in the evening. There's a folklore said, counting seven stars one day and after counting them for 7 days, a child can have one dream come true. However, I never made it because I often forgot to count for 7 consecutive days.

<em>I remember that when I was a primary school student, I liked counting stars in the evening. There is a proverb/saying/folk saying that says "Count seven stars one day and after counting them for seven days, a child can one have dream come true". However, I never made it because I often forgot to count for seven consecutive days.</em>

I hope one day Shanghai will have a clearer sky and I can even see my own Aries in the sky.

<em>I hope one day Shanghai will have a clearer sky and I can even see my own Aries in the sky.</em>

<em>Well done again!</em>

今年夏天我在上海工作。我在上海没看见一个星星！回家的时候，我看见多得星星。

Should immigrants accept the new culture?

Topic: Some people think immigrants should accept the new culture as their own. Others believe that they should keep their own culture. Discuss both views and give your opionion.

<em>Topic: Some people think immigrants should accept their new culture as their own. Others believe that they should keep their own culture. Discuss both views and give your opionion. (I know that you didn't write this bit, but the way it is phrased is very odd)</em>

(Nowadays, an increasing number of people are migrating to other countries than ever before. This raises questions about the integration of newcomers into society. Although some people claim that immigrants should maintain their own culture, I personally believe that it is the responsibility of immigrants to adapt to the new culture of their adopted countries.

<em>EITHER: "Nowadays, an increasing number of people are migrating to other countries" OR "Nowadays, more people are migrating to other countries than ever before." Otherwise, perfect.</em>

People who believe that immigrants should respect and accept the new culture argue that it can afford immigrants a fair chance to succeed. Specifically, immigrants would avoid many conflicts and interact with locals successfully, especially in the workplace, if they adopt the local culture and customs. For example, in western culture, people usually keep a distance from each other when having a conversation. Thus, obviously, those immigrants who adhere to this custom are more likely to be welcomed. In addition, because of their willingness to merge into the new culture, they, more often than not, integrate into the new society more quickly than their reluctant counterparts and tend to have a better chance to succeed.

<em>People who believe that immigrants should respect and accept their new cultures argue that it can give (afford sounds strange) immigrants a fair chance to succeed.Specifically, immigrants will avoid many conflicts and interact with locals successfully, especially in the workplace, if they adopt local culture and customs. For example, in western culture, people usually keep a distance from each other when having a conversation. Thus, obviously, those immigrants who adhere to this custom are more likely to be welcomed. In addition, because of their willingness to merge into the new culture, they, more often than not, integrate into their new society more quickly than their reluctant counterparts and tend to have a better chance of success. (sounds smoother than what you wrote)</em>

Yet others claim that immigrants keeping the culture of their home countries would benefit the society. The main reason is that a mixture of different cultures and traditions could give a country color and vibrancy. However, such an argument ignores the fact that too much culture diversity undermines a society by alienating people from each other. It is because similarities unite people whereas differences have a tendency to divide. Conversely, culture assimilation contributes to reducing hostility and improving the mutual understanding between immigrants and locals, thereby creating a harmonious society. 

<em>Yet others claim that immigrants keeping the culture of their home countries would benefit society. (whatever your textbook says, it is not 'the' society. A lot of Hong Kongers say 'the society' but we don't in the UK) The main reason is that a mixture of different cultures and traditions could give a country color and vibrancy. However, such an argument ignores the fact that too much cultural diversity undermines a society by alienating people from each other. It is because similarities unite people whereas differences have a tendency to divide. Conversely, cultural assimilation contributes to reducing hostility and improving the mutual understanding between immigrants and locals, thereby creating a harmonious society. (和谐 much?)</em>

To conclude, adapting to new cultures of the host countries is beneficial to both immigrants and society and I am convinced that it is essential for immigrants to make an effort to do so.

<em>Perfect.</em>

Well done April, what you wrote is the sort of thing I would expect to see from quite a high achieving 16-18 year old here in the UK, though obviously a little shorter. Your English is excellent

Hello world

This is a great website on the internet. It's really fantastic for learning a new language here. I will try to write something down here to improve my writing skills. Well, I do hope that I can get help from the English native speakers:)

(There are no <em>mistakes</em> here, what I have written just sounds more natural)

This is a great website on the internet. It's really fantastic for learning a new language. I will try to write something down to improve my language skills. Well, I hope that I can get some help from the native English speakers :)

Tell me how to learn English well?

Why my English so badly? As a senior student , I will go to school on August 1 . Later，i rarely have the opportunity to learn English in here, I really hope that someone can teach me English.

Why is my English so bad? As a senior student, I will go to school on August 1st. Later (better to say 'Then', 比较喜欢说 ‘Then'), I will rarely have the opportunity to learn English on here. I really hope that someone can teach me English.

Good luck!

First notebook entry: Introducing myself

I'm a normal Chinese boy who are facing great challenges in learning English. Since I set myself the goal of working for a foreign company, I need to put all my efforts into English. I think the best way to learning English is talking with English spoken guys directly. Please do not hesitate to contact me when you want to make a Chinese friend and I can also teach you Chinese.

Hello! A good start, be careful with plurals.