It mostly looks good. I just have a few notes: - At least in American English, the term is usually culture shock, rather than cultural shock. Yes, cultural shock sounds more grammatically correct. - The first "the" may or may not be correct, depending on if this is the first paragraph or not. - Delete "in speech." I'm sure people write those terms sometimes, too. - The relative clause "who find themselves..." could be clearer. There are a few options. It is written as a non-defining relative clause, which means it is just adding information. It is like saying: "Most immigrants find themselves in a foreign culture. Also, they experience culture shock." I think that's sort of redundant. It would be better to either delete the clause and just say "immigrants," or if you want to expand the group to include, for example, short-term expatriates, you could turn the clause into a defining relative clause and say: "most people who find themselves in a foreign culture experience it." If you want to focus on immigrants, you could even say "most immigrants, and other people who find themselves in a foreign culture experience it." - "stress tension" is awkward. Choose one. - "feeling of self-identification" is a bit unclear. Is it a symptom, or is the violation of it a symptom? If it's the second one, delete "feeling of" - "is becoming" should be "becomes" or probably "may become" I hope that helps. Feel free to contact me for more feedback.