Some Thinking About Medical Crowdfunding in China

I appreciate medical crowdfunding so much. About four years ago, my newborn nephew got a rare blood disease which costs a lot of money. My <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">cousin </s>sister was heartbroken then. She and her husband had a decent income, but their savings hardly covered the medical fees. It was the crowdfunding platform Shuidichou that helped them get donations from warm-hearted strangers. Thanks to the help from friends and donators, my nephew is a robust little man now.

So many families like my sister’s got medical donations through crowdfunding platforms in recent years. This kind of platform<s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">s</s> offers easy access to good, willing people for those that need financial help for their illnesses <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">to connect with good willing people</s>. And they are trusted for their transparency and effectiveness.

Medical crowdfunding platforms also have some drawbacks. First, it’s inhumane for patients and patients’ family members to get money by showing how much pain<s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">ful</s> they are in. As a donator, I certainly want my donation to go where it’s needed most. This means other donators will probably only fund the people with the saddest story. Given the limited donor pool, patients who are seeking donations are trapped in competition; the best storyteller has the biggest chance of survival.

What’s more, the platforms neglect<s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">ed</s> the people who need the most help. For example, patients who <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">even </s>do not have a smartphone have no idea about crowdfunding platforms. In China, a lot of rural residents cannot type, and most of them are aging people. Crowdfunding platforms' users cannot afford medical bills, but aging rural people might not even have the opportunity to go to the hospital until they die.

In conclusion, medical crowdfunding platforms do an outstanding job <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">to</s> helping people. At the same time, we <s style="color: rgb(230, 0, 0);">also </s>hope that they can make improvements to their existing problems.

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