Overall, you did a great job since it looks good to me. Only one small thing-for daily greetings, Chinese people usually start with “你吃了没” or “好久不见！” rather than “你好吗-我很好-你呢？”, which sounds like a more western way to greet each other. So from my perspective, the dialogue can start directly from “好久不见，我有很多事想告诉你！”