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我和汉语
目前我<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">准确地可以说</s>可以肯定地说(so “准确地” means "accurately", but here you need to use "肯定地/确信地” to express "certainly". Plus, “可以” should be put ahead.),汉语是我生活中重要的一(it sounds more natural to add “一” , which is "a".)部分。2016年,我上大学了。从<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">这一刻</s>那时 (you need to use 那(that) to replace 这(this) , and since 2016 is quite a long period of time so you'd better not use 那一刻(that moment)起,我开始学习这种语言。<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">临</s>在(临 is formal and you just use 在)上大学前,我已经会说英语和法语。应该说,以前我从来没对东方语言感兴趣。第一个学期时,我觉得,我完蛋了。可是在天天写汉字、听录音和做<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">巨大</s>很多/大量(巨大 is to describe volume or degree, but is not used to describe amount)的作业下,最后我爱上了汉语。第二个学期比第一个<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">十分</s>更(you need to use 更 to make comparison)容易。我在继续提高我汉语的水平。
你们知道,有时候老师们自己可以让你不再爱学的语言(sorry, but i can't understand what u wanted to express)。由于<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">很无聊的课</s>课程很无聊(由于 cannot be followed simply with a noun.),今年我突然明白了,大学汉语课<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">对我不是足够的</s>对我是不足够的,所以我要<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">想想</s>好好斟酌一下(well, there is no grammar error,but since u wanted to say that u needed to think about whether u need to choose a better way to study Chinese,then i think my expression is more accurate and natural.)。六月考试<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">时间</s>以后,我<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">用网络开始了</s>开始用网络提高我汉语的水平。<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">我的意思是</s>那是一个(so i can tell that u wanted to use "i mean..." as u use it in English, but in Chinese we don't use that expression.)非常神奇的网站叫HSCAKE。首先,在HSCAKE的帮助下,我可以自豪地说,我的夏天很<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">有用</s>充实(有用 only meas useful/handy but doesn't mean substantial)。我<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">盼望</s>希望(盼望 means hope sth can come),我不但可以提高语言的水平,而且能找到<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">了</s>(if these things have not come yet, u need to use future tense)<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">新生</s>新的<s style="background-color: rgb(102, 185, 102);">(</s>新生 means newly-born)力量继续学汉语。
<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">综上所述</s>总之(well, 综上所述 is way too formal),汉语在我的生活中是很神奇的事情。我希望,将来我和汉语不会<s style="background-color: rgb(255, 255, 0);">割舍</s>分离。