leoking's notebook entry: Jul 13, 2010 - Travelling Travelling is increasingly popular all over the world these days. Many people prefer to take a tour to other countries to learn different cultures there in their spare time. Generally speaking, the aboard experience will wide the vision of the traveler in certain areas. However, studies show that this is not always true for travelling people, many of which even narrow their mind after travelling aboard. How does this happen? This phenomenon, as far as I am concerned, is linked to their limited travel area and time. Most travelers prefer famous cities and natural stages when travelling aboard. Big cities likes London, Beijing, and New York are typically most developed areas in a country, which represent the modern culture and life. In contrast, the less developed cities or areas represents the traditional culture of a country. The travelers who denial to visit these less developed areas loss the opportunity to get a full view of a country. Another reason for the travelers to narrow their mind after travelling is that their travel schedule is too tight and their travel time is too limited. Many tour company make short and composite travel plans for the people who want to make a travel but do not have too much time. The travelers who take part in the tour company's travel plan are integrated into tour groups and are then directed by a tourist guide, who help them finish the travel in a short time. This kind of short travel, as far as I am concerned, just like the fast food, can provide nothing more than just an interesting experience. In order to form a full view of a foreign country, and thus wide their mind, the travelers have to make a detailed plan before their travel, which should provide enough time and space for them to learn the culture in a foreign. They should travel according to your own schedule rather than take the short travel plan provided by the tour company, which would otherwise narrow their mind.

Please help me correct and improve this essay about travelling. It is for IELTS. Travelling is increasingly popular all over the world these days. Many people prefer to take a tour to other countries to learn different cultures there in their spare time. Generally speaking, the aboard experience will wide the vision of the traveler in certain areas. However, studies show that this is not always true for travelling people, many of which even narrow their mind after travelling aboard. How does this happen? This phenomenon, as far as I am concerned, is linked to their limited travel area and time. Most travelers prefer famous cities and natural stages when travelling aboard. Big cities likes London, Beijing, and New York are typically most developed areas in a country, which represent the modern culture and life. In contrast, the less developed cities or areas represents the traditional culture of a country. The travelers who denial to visit these less developed areas loss the opportunity to get a full view of a country. Another reason for the travelers to narrow their mind after travelling is that their travel schedule is too tight and their travel time is too limited. Many tour company make short and composite travel plans for the people who want to make a travel but do not have too much time. The travelers who take part in the tour company's travel plan are integrated into tour groups and are then directed by a tourist guide, who help them finish the travel in a short time. This kind of short travel, as far as I am concerned, just like the fast food, can provide nothing more than just an interesting experience. In order to form a full view of a foreign country, and thus wide their mind, the travelers have to make a detailed plan before their travel, which should provide enough time and space for them to learn the culture in a foreign. They should travel according to your own schedule rather than take the short travel plan provided by the tour company, which would otherwise narrow their mind.

Is there any mistakes in this email? I thought it is fine, but my supervisor told me it is terrible! Why? Dear xxxx, I am currently living in the university (xxxx), so that my home address is the same with my university address. My affiliation in the body of this letter is expected to be written as: xxxxxxx Please add an additional section in the body of this letter: xxxxx Please use one of the ready-to-print address labels (either PDF or PNG format), which are attached in this mail and show my address in both English and Chinese, to send me the original copy of the letter. Additionally, could you do me a favor to email me a scanned copy of this letter before sending it to me? Thank you for your help.Let me introduce the background of this mail. xxxx told me that he is going to write me a letter to certificate the offer of my scholarship. (Is this sentence problematic?) And I write the mail showed to you to tell him how to write my address and some other detailed issues about the letter.

Please help me find mistakes in this email (you can also refine or improve it). Dear xxx, The overseas scholarship that covers all of my tuition fees is crucial for me to study at UCL. The notification of this scholarship is also a critical document to support my application for UK Visa and many other related materials. So that, please notify me the result of this scholarship as soon as possible. I think 15th August 2010 is a bit too late for me to finish the remaining steps to study aboard. I wonder whether the notification could be given in July this year. Could you call me when you get time? Thank you for your patient help. I really appreciate it. Yours sincerely, xxxx.