I need a little help right now. I will appreciate if u contact me. Hi:) I'm korean and i'm preparing a cover letter. I have just finished wirting it, but i want to be checked. I will be looking forward to your contact.

I'm appreciate if you chech my writing. I’m not a woman. I’m a lusty young man. My daily routine starts by working out at gyms. (I begin my day by working out at gyms.) Thanks to this behavior (Therefore), I could develop strength to stay up all night. As an extension of (As a continuation of) it, I walked ‘Camino de Santiago’ which is an about 900km route in northern Spain, enduring sunlight of summer and geothermal heat of asphalt. For the 33 days, I walked with heavy backpack weighing 10kg and it led to a lot of blister on my foot. However, I didn’t give up with responsibility for my challenge and finished. Although it was a challenge for my hobby, these mental patience and physical strength could be a good stepping stone for carrying out my internship. I will do my internship as a passionate young man, not a woman. parenthesis is more natural? or not? And I will appreciate if you check the whole texts.

which sentence is more natural? I’m not a woman. I’m a lusty young man. My daily routine starts by working out at gyms. (I begin my day by working out at gyms.) Thanks to this behavior (Therefore), I could develop strength to stay up all night. As an extension of (As a continuation of) it, I walked ‘Camino de Santiago’ which is an about 900km route in northern Spain, enduring sunlight of summer and geothermal heat of asphalt. For the 33 days, I walked with heavy backpack weighing 10kg and it led to a lot of blister on my foot. However, I didn’t give up with responsibility for my challenge and finished. Although it was a challenge for my hobby, these mental patience and physical strength could be a good stepping stone for carrying out my internship. I will do my internship as a passionate young man, not a woman. parenthesis is more natural? or not? And I will appreciate if you check the whole texts. It is a script for interview