5. "It's still 5pm! By the way Besides, Luke and Jacob were having a shower! That was why I PUT it OFF!" replied Adam.

    --> "By the way" means "incidentally, in passing, as an aside..." -- that is, it is generally used to add relatively unimportant extra information, information you think of while speaking. A better word for this dialogue would be "besides," which is used as a synonym for "furthermore," a word that strengthens an argument by adding extra, more persuasive information.

    --> Second observation: your usage of "put of" is correct, but it was missing the object it referred to (in this case, "taking a shower"). The simplest way to solve the problem was by adding the pronoun "it."

6. "Hi, sweetheart! I am going to be delayed! It's been a tough day!"

7. "Nothing that special. Work, work, work. I think we'll not come [arrive at/get to/make it to] the pizzeria on time. What How about going to the VEGGI's? It's still open after 9pm. As the a matter of fact, all the the whole family has been PUTTING ON more weight than normal."

    --> One interesting observation here is the difference between "what about" and "how about." Here is an article that discusses that difference: https://english.stackexchange.com/questions/13659/how-about-vs-what-about

    --> Another observation is that it sounds much more normal (from a U.S. American English perspective) to say "the whole family" rather than "all the family." While it is grammatically acceptable to say the latter, the former is more common. To see a graph comparing the usage of both phrases, check out this link: https://books.google.com/ngrams/graph?content=all+the+family%2C+the+whole+family&year_start=1800&year_end=2000&corpus=15&smoothing=3&share=&direct_url=t1%3B%2Call%20the%20family%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20whole%20family%3B%2Cc0#t1%3B%2Call%20the%20family%3B%2Cc0%3B.t1%3B%2Cthe%20whole%20family%3B%2Cc0

    --> Finally, if you wish to use "put on" in the sense of "gain weight," it is necessary to include the word "weight" OR the amount of weight that you gained. (i.e. It is not grammatically correct to say, "I put on last summer" -- a correct version would be, "I put on [weight/15 pounds] last summer.")

I hope these suggestions are helpful! If you have any questions or comments, it would be a pleasure to discuss them with you during our next session.

Best,

Ross

An excellent text, Raphael! Here are a few observations to make it even better:

1.  "Hey, mom! Jacob's wearing my new jacket!" the oldest son Luke yelled.

    --> Dialogue is generally represented between quotation marks (" ") rather than hyphens (- -). Also, it is recommended to place a comma before a person when he or she is being spoken to directly (in this case, "mom"). For more examples of quotation marks around dialogue, check out this article: https://www.grammarly.com/blog/quotation-marks-and-dialogue/

2. "Jacob! How long shall I PUT UP WITH this situation? Your brother's clothes are way bigger than yours! Why don't you PUT your new Jeans Jacket jean jacket ON?" spoke said Mrs. Oliveira while she was wearing her earrings.

    --> The most important observation here is the difference between "speak" and "say." You can "speak" a language, you can "speak" with your boss, and you can "speak" out of turn (among other uses!), but it is not normal to say that someone "spoke" a line of dialogue. For more practice, check out this video on YouTube: https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=IHcGSJlJeZk

    --> Second observation: while it's grammatically correct to say that the mother said what she said "while she was wearing her earrings," this sounds a bit strange. Perhaps it would be more common to say, "while she was putting on her earrings."

3. "But, mommy! Luke's jacket are is more stylish than mine!" replied the little Jacob.

     --> Nothing huge here -- just "is" vs. "are."

4. I won't speak say it again, Jacob! Give him Luke back Luke's his jacket or PUT it AWAY. We are running out of time!"

    --> "Speak" vs. "say," as I already mentioned in point #2. The other important observation is that it is misleading to say "give him back Luke's jacket" because this implies that there is another person (not Luke) to whom Jacob needs to give Luke's jacket back. This is, however, not the case. Therefore, I recommend saying, "Give Luke back his jacket."

Hey there, Dora,

Here are my suggested changes for your text (an 'X' represents an incorrect sentence, whereas asterisks '***' represent a strange-sounding or ambiguous sentence):

1. (X) I began to think more about life. Such the hobbies.

--> I began to think more about life, which led me to hobbies. // I began to think more about life, a big part of which are our hobbies.

2. (X) Why do we should have hobbies?

--> Why should we have hobbies? 

3. (***) Have a hobby that will help you in your social life and connect with others. 

--> Have a hobby that will help you in your social life and make it easier to connect with others. // Have a hobby that will help you grow in your social life and connect with others. 

4. (X) Let you increase your expectations and excitement about life. 

--> Hobbies let you increase your expectations and excitement about life. // Increase your expectations and excitement about life by taking up a hobby!

5. (X) So hobbies have many benefits, we better have hobbies.

--> So hobbies have many benefits; we'd better have hobbies. ("we'd better" = "we had better")

6. (***) And once you don't develop your hobby, your hobby slowly becomes no longer your hobby.

--> And once you've stopped developing your hobby, it slowly fades away/withers/dies/diminishes.

7. (X) Even if you have the time, the energy, the financial resources to develop your hobbies, but still can't lose them because you can't stick to it.

--> Even if you have the time, the energy, and the financial resources to develop your hobbies, it is still possible to lose them by not sticking to them. (The main problem with your sentence was the incorrect combination of the logical connectors "even if...but," which are not used together.)

8. (***) Hobbies are not what you like, so you will be able to stick to it until you have learned very well.

--> Hobbies are not always enjoyable, so you will need to stick to them until you have learned them very well.

9. (***) Let them develop their hobbies better.

--> Help them develop their hobbies better. (The problem with 'let' is that it make the parent sound very passive -- like a person whose goal is simply to 'not be an obstacle' as their child develops hobbies. I believe that 'help' paints a more active picture of the parent.)

For more practice and conversation, check out my teacher profile on Italki!

Best,

Ross