Essay #176 "Success in Life" 12.07.18

Everyone wants to be successful and archive achieve their goals in life, and, therefore, people want to know what is the key factor for it. Many people think that hard working plays the main role in these achievements, however others think that they are this is not so important. It is hard to decide what is the most significant and, in my opinion, there is are a complex number of factors which are crucial for that.

On the one side hand, to build a successful career people should show a great determination in their work and only this can move them further in their career path. This rule is not applied only for working lives, any activity, even hobbies and other interests, require dedication and commitment to reach intended aims. Without this determination it is just almost impossible to be successful in either a working career or personal life, thus hard working plays an essential part of a career building or achieving set goals.

On the other side hand, a good amount of luck can plummet propel a person’s career to great heights, sometimes people even do not need to put any work in it even with minimal effort. At the same time, misfortunes can spoil the life even of a very determined person. Also, the initial position in live can either give an advantage or create obstacles to further success. People from reach rich families have access to better education and have less trouble to get more prestigious jobs. Thus, lack of talent and commitment can, to some degree, be replaced by these two factors.

To conclude, success is one of the key aspects of a happy life almost for everybody. Thus, to finding out how to achieve it is very important for people. In most cases success comprises both of elements which depends on a the person themselves, which are such as hard working and determination, and random factors, such as luck and initial position in life. However, people should understand that they are able to do anything they want, the only real element of success is their desire to reach their dreams.

Re-write of the last paragraph for clarity:

In conclusion, success is one of the key aspects of a happy life. In most cases, success is a result of both internal qualities such as hard work and determination, and of external factors such as luck and socio-economic conditions. However, the ultimate factor in success is actually person's desire, and a belief in their own ability to reach their dreams.

Hi Eu.k

This is very well written! I love your use of complex sentences and punctuation. My corrections are largely just refining and clarifying.

Also, I couldn't agree more with the ideas you are expressing here! 

Regards, Julie

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About four years ago I found a website with tones of my favorite (British spelling: favourite) series in English. My journey began with my first subscription.

I've started with "Friends" and "Gossip Girl", both of which I saw were previously seen in Russian. It was difficult to understand the actors at first, but day by day it was getting easier and easier.
My passive vocabulary is growing, and I can easily speak in English (not flawless, of cause).

For four years TV series and films were only English thing surrounded me. No books, no writing. So it's damn hard to describe my thoughts on paper without practice.

A Peace piece of advice : don't forget to practice every aspect of the language :)) even grammar!

Hi Sofia, 

This is very well written, and even with the few mistakes was easy to understand. Well done!

Regards,

Julie